Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn. Hãy tập trung trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về công việc hiện tại.

예시: I work as a business analyst at a bank in Hanoi. I enjoy my job because it offers a good salary and opportunities to develop my skills. In the future, I plan to pursue a master's degree in business analytics to enhance my expertise.

× I I realized my job because it gave me have have a high salary.

✓ I realized my job because it gave me a high salary.

The sentence contains repeated words 'I' and 'have have' which are unnecessary and incorrect. Removing the duplicates corrects the sentence structure and verb usage.

× I'm work in a bank in in Hanoi is a capital in Vietnam and my rose is busy need analyst.

✓ I work in a bank in Hanoi, which is the capital of Vietnam, and my role is business analyst.

The phrase 'I'm work' is incorrect; it should be 'I work'. Also, 'rose' is a misspelling of 'role'. The sentence needed proper prepositions and articles for clarity.

× I always use the database and make the frame for developer to work in to work and build the the app and many user can use it.

✓ I always use the database and create the framework for developers to work and build the app so many users can use it.

The phrase 'make the frame for developer to work in to work' is awkward and incorrect. 'Create the framework for developers' is the correct expression. Also, 'user' should be plural 'users'.

× For me, it's a good play, uh, good play to work because, umm, in my bank, it gave me a, a good, a good job opportunities and moreover, it gave me a high salary.

✓ For me, it's a good place to work because, in my bank, it gives me good job opportunities and moreover, it gives me a high salary.

'Play' is a wrong word; it should be 'place'. Also, 'gave' should be 'gives' to match present tense. 'A good job opportunities' is incorrect; 'job opportunities' is plural and does not need 'a'.

× One of the most things that I want to live this is salaries.

✓ One of the most important things that I want to live for is the salary.

The sentence is unclear and uses 'live this' incorrectly. It should express that salary is an important factor for living. Also, 'salaries' should be singular 'salary' in this context.

× My colleagues is so, so smart and uh, and so excellent and.

✓ My colleagues are so smart and excellent.

'Colleagues' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. The sentence also ends abruptly and should be completed properly.

× I think in the future, I still work in in my place, in the bank, in the in the capital right now.

✓ I think in the future, I will still work at my place, in the bank, in the capital city.

The phrase 'work in in my place' is incorrect; 'work at my place' is better. Also, 'in the in the capital right now' is redundant and awkward.

× However, I think that I will I will study in a MasterCard to improve my knowledge as well as the experience to serve my work.

✓ However, I think that I will study for a Master's degree to improve my knowledge as well as my experience to serve my work.

'MasterCard' is incorrect; it should be 'Master's degree'. Also, 'study in a MasterCard' is incorrect preposition usage; 'study for a Master's degree' is correct.