Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Also, use articles correctly, for example, say 'an IT entrepreneur' instead of 'a IT entrepreneur'.

예시: Currently, I am preparing for my IELTS exam and working as an IT entrepreneur from home. I enjoy my job and earn a good salary.

제안: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and is a bit unclear. Use the correct tense and avoid mixing past and present unnecessarily. Also, try to be more specific and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: I currently work at AIM Overseas, which I really enjoy. This job is beneficial for me, and it has been my dream since childhood to have such a part-time job.

제안: Your answer is positive but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Use past and present tenses correctly and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, it is a great place to work. I feel refreshed whenever I go there, and I enjoy spending time with my colleagues. Moreover, the quiet and peaceful environment makes it even better.

제안: Your answer is good but a bit long and repetitive. Try to combine similar ideas and use linking words to improve flow. Also, pay attention to subject-verb agreement and article usage.

예시: Yes, I like the place where I work because my colleagues are very helpful and supportive whenever I face difficulties. Additionally, the manager is kind and motivates me to perform well, which makes the environment pleasant.

제안: Your answer conveys your plans but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Use articles correctly ('an entrepreneur'), avoid repeating the same idea, and use linking words to connect your points logically.

예시: To be honest, I want to become an entrepreneur in Canada, which has been my dream since I was in Class 8. Currently, I am training for this job, and I believe working abroad will be a great opportunity for my future.

× I work as a IT entrepreneur at my home

✓ I work as an IT entrepreneur at my home

The article 'a' is incorrect before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'IT'. It should be 'an' instead of 'a'. This is a common article error in English.

× I worked at AIM overseas and I'm enjoying my job nowadays

✓ I work at AIM overseas and I'm enjoying my job nowadays

The sentence mixes past tense 'worked' with present continuous 'I'm enjoying'. Since the student is currently enjoying the job, the verb should be in present tense 'work' to maintain tense consistency.

× I had a dream when I was child to having this kind of part time job in my life

✓ I had a dream when I was a child to have this kind of part time job in my life

After 'to' (infinitive marker), the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Also, 'child' needs the article 'a' before it.

× I feel very refreshed when I went there

✓ I feel very refreshed when I go there

The sentence mixes present tense 'feel' with past tense 'went'. To express a habitual action, both verbs should be in present tense.

× I enjoyed with my colleagues as well

✓ I enjoyed my time with my colleagues as well

The verb 'enjoy' is not used with the preposition 'with' directly. It should be 'enjoyed my time with' or simply 'enjoyed my colleagues' company'.

× I love to been there

✓ I love to be there

After 'to', the base form of the verb should be used, not the past participle 'been'.

× he also encourage and motivates me a lot

✓ he also encourages and motivates me a lot

The subject 'he' requires the third person singular form of the verb, which is 'encourages' not 'encourage'.

× I want to become a entrepreneur in Canada

✓ I want to become an entrepreneur in Canada

The article 'a' is incorrect before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'entrepreneur'. It should be 'an' instead of 'a'.