Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Please use correct job titles and complete sentences. For example, say "I have been working as a government employee for 10 years."

예시: I have been working as a government employee for 10 years.

제안: Your answer is mostly clear but a bit repetitive. Avoid repeating words like "Division" twice. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I work in the Ministry of Finance, specifically in the Financial Institutions Division. I have been here for two years, and I really enjoy my job.

제안: Your answer has good content but needs better structure and clearer linking words. Also, correct grammar like "that means" instead of "that mean".

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because I have supportive colleagues. Moreover, since my background is in marketing, I can apply my business knowledge in the financial sector here.

제안: Your answer is too long and somewhat repetitive. Try to be concise and use linking words to organize your points logically.

예시: Yes, I like my workplace because the environment is calm and the building is well-structured. Additionally, the rooms are nicely decorated and equipped with all necessary technical support.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains errors like "Isles on the wave" instead of "IELTS exam". Please clarify your plans and use correct terms.

예시: I plan to continue working here for another two years. After that, I want to pursue a degree abroad, so I am currently preparing for the IELTS exam.

× I am a goblin job holder and working for.

✓ I am a goblin job holder and I am working here.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a proper verb phrase after 'working for'. Adding 'I am working here' completes the sentence structure and clarifies the meaning.

× I have been working for 10 years.

✓ I have been working for 10 years.

This sentence is grammatically correct and uses the present perfect continuous tense appropriately to indicate an action continuing up to now.

× I work in the Ministry of Finance under the Division of Financial Institution Division and I have been here for two years and I enjoy working here.

✓ I work in the Ministry of Finance under the Financial Institution Division, and I have been here for two years. I enjoy working here.

The phrase 'under the Division of Financial Institution Division' is redundant and awkward. It should be 'under the Financial Institution Division'. Also, the sentence is long and should be split for clarity.

× Obviously it is a good place to work because here we have good colleagues and as my background is marketing, that mean business background, I work in the financial institutions so I can exercise my past knowledge in this sector.

✓ Obviously, it is a good place to work because we have good colleagues here. As my background is in marketing, which means a business background, I work in financial institutions so I can apply my past knowledge in this sector.

The sentence has pronoun and article errors. 'That mean' should be 'which means'. 'In the financial institutions' should be 'in financial institutions'. Also, splitting the sentence improves clarity.

× Yes, I like the place where I am or because the environment is very much soothing, it has a good building and it's a good structure and all the rooms are well decorated with the file cabinet and all the technical supports are available here.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I am because the environment is very soothing. It has a good building and structure, all the rooms are well decorated with file cabinets, and all the technical support is available here.

The phrase 'where I am or because' is incorrect; 'or' should be removed. 'File cabinet' should be plural 'file cabinets'. 'Technical supports' should be 'technical support' as it is uncountable.

× My future work plans are to be continued here and as I am continuing for two years, I want to actually do another two years and next I want to take a degree from abroad, so I am taking my Isles on the wave.

✓ My future work plans are to continue here. Since I have been working here for two years, I want to continue for another two years. Next, I want to pursue a degree abroad, so I am preparing for my IELTS exam.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect expressions. 'To be continued here' should be 'to continue here'. 'I am taking my Isles on the wave' is incorrect and likely means 'I am preparing for my IELTS exam'. The sentence is split for clarity and correctness.