Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors like 'includes' should be 'include'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: I work as a Management Information System Officer at Connectors, a well-known company in Kuleshwar. My main responsibilities include generating reports, analyzing data, and evaluating tax records. I really enjoy my work because it challenges me and helps me grow professionally.

제안: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and unclear words like 'Amis officer'. Use the present tense since you currently work there. Also, avoid filler words like 'uh'. Be specific and clear about your role and the company.

예시: I work at UMM Kuleshwar as an MIS officer. The company specializes in manufacturing, wholesaling, and retailing cosmetic products.

제안: Your answer is positive but has some repetition and minor grammar errors. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' properly. Try to be more specific about the opportunities and how colleagues help you.

예시: Yes, it is a great place to work because it offers various opportunities for professional growth. Also, I can improve my knowledge of the cosmetic industry. Moreover, the peaceful environment and supportive colleagues make my work enjoyable.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and has repetition. Avoid repeating words like 'very very'. Complete your sentences and use linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about what makes your boss good.

예시: Yes, I like the place where I work because the environment is peaceful and my colleagues are very supportive, always ready to help me when needed. In addition, our boss is understanding and encourages us to do our best.

제안: Your answer has repetition and some unclear ideas. Avoid repeating words like 'because'. Also, explain your reasons more clearly and use linking words to organize your ideas.

예시: In the future, I would like to establish my own business because I believe it will give me more freedom and less pressure. Additionally, I can make my own decisions and earn money independently.

× My main responsibilities includes generalizing reports, analysing data and evaluating the tax records and I really enjoy my work.

✓ My main responsibilities include generalizing reports, analysing data and evaluating the tax records and I really enjoy my work.

The subject 'responsibilities' is plural, so the verb should be 'include' instead of 'includes' to agree in number.

× I worked in the UMM Kuleshawar as Amis officer uh.

✓ I work in the UMM Kuleshwar as an MIS officer.

The question asks about current work, so present tense 'work' is appropriate. Also, 'Kuleshawar' is corrected to 'Kuleshwar' and 'Amis officer' to 'MIS officer' for clarity.

× The company specializes in manufacturing, wholesaling and retailing the cosmetic products.

✓ The company specializes in manufacturing, wholesaling and retailing cosmetic products.

When speaking generally about products, the definite article 'the' is not needed before 'cosmetic products'.

× Yes, absolutely it is nice place to work because it it gives us the various opportunities.

✓ Yes, absolutely it is a nice place to work because it gives us various opportunities.

The phrase 'nice place' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Also, 'the various opportunities' should be 'various opportunities' without 'the' when speaking generally.

× Also, we can improve our knowledge on cosmetic industry as well.

✓ Also, we can improve our knowledge of the cosmetic industry as well.

The correct preposition to use with 'knowledge' is 'of'. Also, 'cosmetic industry' needs the definite article 'the'.

× In fact, I love the peaceful environment and supportive colleagues which always help me.

✓ In fact, I love the peaceful environment and supportive colleagues who always help me.

The relative pronoun 'which' is used for things, while 'who' is used for people like 'colleagues'.

× Yes, absolutely it is nice place to work because it it gives us the various opportunities.

✓ Yes, absolutely it is a nice place to work because it gives us various opportunities.

Repeated sentence corrected similarly: 'a nice place' needs the article 'a' and 'the various opportunities' should be 'various opportunities'.

× especially my colleagues are very supportive who are always to help me when needed.

✓ especially my colleagues are very supportive and are always ready to help me when needed.

The phrase 'who are always to help me' is incorrect; it should be 'and are always ready to help me' for proper meaning and grammar.

× In addition, our boss is very.

✓ In addition, our boss is very supportive.

The sentence is incomplete and needs an adjective to complete the thought; 'supportive' fits the context.

× Well, in the future I would like to establish my own business because because I believe establishing own business has no pressure and I can do anything I want and also I can earn money solely.

✓ Well, in the future I would like to establish my own business because I believe establishing my own business has no pressure, I can do anything I want, and I can also earn money solely.

The phrase 'establishing own business' needs the possessive pronoun 'my' to be correct. Also, repeated 'because' is reduced to one, and commas added for clarity.