Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and clear. Avoid unnecessary details like '+2 in Adobe' which may confuse the listener. Instead, directly state your current status and recent education. Also, try to use linking words to make your answer smoother.

예시: I am currently a student. I recently completed my higher secondary education under the British board.

제안: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Use correct tense and avoid repeating 'yet'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

예시: I haven't started working yet because I am still a student. I plan to pursue my degree abroad to gain better opportunities.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be more concise and directly address the question. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid redundancy like repeating 'I don't work at the moment'.

예시: Since I am not working currently, I cannot comment on a workplace. However, I plan to study abroad to gain better knowledge, educational opportunities, and experience a new culture.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and a bit unclear. Try to answer directly and avoid repeating the same information. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and concise.

예시: I don't have a workplace currently as I am still studying. After completing my degree abroad, I hope to work in a place that offers good facilities, opportunities, and exposure to different cultures.

제안: Your answer shows your plans but lacks clarity and contains repetition. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your points logically.

예시: In the future, I plan to open my own studio brand. I also want to expand it to other cities to provide similar facilities and opportunities.

× I recently completed my +2 in Adobe in the British board.

✓ I recently completed my +2 in Adobe from the British board.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'British board'. The correct preposition is 'from' to indicate the institution from which the qualification was obtained.

× So I didn't start work yet because I'm a student yet and I want to pursue my degree in abroad.

✓ So I haven't started work yet because I am still a student and I want to pursue my degree abroad.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'didn't start work yet' should be present perfect 'haven't started work yet' to indicate an action not completed up to now; 'I'm a student yet' is incorrect, 'I am still a student' is correct; 'in abroad' is incorrect, 'abroad' does not require a preposition here.

× I want to pursue my degree in abroad.

✓ I want to pursue my degree abroad.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary before 'abroad'. 'Abroad' is an adverb meaning 'in or to a foreign country' and does not require a preposition.

× I'm planning to pursue my degree abroad to gain better knowledge, educational opportunities and experience a new culture.

✓ I'm planning to pursue my degree abroad to gain better knowledge, educational opportunities, and experience new cultures.

The phrase 'experience a new culture' is better expressed in plural as 'experience new cultures' to indicate exposure to various cultures. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' in a list for clarity.

× I will start work after my completion of degree but still I have to pursue my degree in abroad because of various facilities and opportunities and learning about different culture.

✓ I will start work after completing my degree, but I still have to pursue my degree abroad because of various facilities, opportunities, and to learn about different cultures.

'Completion of degree' is better expressed as 'completing my degree'; 'in abroad' is incorrect, 'abroad' does not take a preposition; 'learning about different culture' should be 'to learn about different cultures' for parallel structure and plural form.

× Well, if my if I talk about my future work plans, I want to open my own brand like studio.

✓ Well, if I talk about my future work plans, I want to open my own brand, like a studio.

The phrase 'if my if I talk' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'if I talk'. Also, 'like studio' needs an article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× I also want to open these kinds of brand to provide the facilities in cities like in other cities.

✓ I also want to open these kinds of brands to provide facilities in other cities.

'These kinds of brand' should be plural 'brands' to agree with 'kinds'. The phrase 'provide the facilities in cities like in other cities' is redundant and awkward; simplified to 'provide facilities in other cities'.