Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不够完整且有语句未说完，建议回答时保持句子完整，避免中断，同时可以更自然地表达工作经历。

예시: I have been working for over ten years. Previously, I ran an online shop on Taobao, which is the largest e-commerce platform in China. However, I have since closed the shop and am currently exploring new opportunities.

제안: 回答中有语法错误且表达不够清晰，建议使用完整句子并避免口语填充词，使表达更自然流畅。

예시: I used to work in an office, but now I work from home. I spend my time taking photos and creating short creative videos using my phone.

제안: 回答中有口语填充词“umm”，建议减少使用，同时可以增加具体细节来支持观点，使回答更丰富。

예시: Yes, definitely. I think my house is the best place to work because the atmosphere is very relaxed, and I find it easier to focus without the usual office distractions.

제안: 回答中多次出现口语填充词，建议减少使用，并且可以用更具体的理由说明喜欢在家工作的原因。

예시: Yes, I love working at home because it provides a quiet environment where I can concentrate on taking photos and editing short videos without interruptions.

제안: 回答未完成且表达不完整，建议完整表达未来计划，并使用连贯的句子结构。

예시: That's a good question. I would like to become a barista because I am a big fan of coffee culture. I want to learn how to use coffee machines properly and master the art of making different types of coffee.

× Now I'm.

✓ Now I am.

句子不完整，缺少谓语或补充信息，导致表达不清晰。应补全句子使其完整。

× I used to work in an office but now I'm more of spontaneous and I just work at home and take some, you know, pictures.

✓ I used to work in an office but now I'm more spontaneous and I just work at home and take some, you know, pictures.

“more of spontaneous”中“of”使用错误，形容词前不应加“of”，应直接用“more spontaneous”。

× Added some creative short videos with my phone.

✓ I add some creative short videos with my phone.

句子缺少主语和谓语，且时态不明确。应补充主语和谓语，使句子完整。

× I quite enjoy there.

✓ I quite enjoy it there.

动词“enjoy”后应接宾语，缺少宾语“it”，导致句子不完整。

× I love umm, I think my house is the best place for me to concentrate when it comes to umm, taking some photos and uh, editing the short videos.

✓ I love it. I think my house is the best place for me to concentrate when it comes to taking some photos and editing short videos.

句子中“love”后缺少宾语，应补充“it”。另外，“the short videos”中“the”可省略，更自然。

× I want to learn more about how to use coffee machines and how to make.

✓ I want to learn more about how to use coffee machines and how to make coffee.

句子不完整，缺少宾语“coffee”，导致表达不清晰。应补全句子。