Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答较为完整，但存在语法错误和表达不够自然的问题。建议注意动词时态一致性，如“start”应为“starting”，并避免重复表达“communication engineering”。

예시: I'm currently a postgraduate student at Shanghai Maritime University, majoring in Communication Engineering. I look forward to graduating next year and starting my career in this field.

제안: 回答过于简短且表达不够自然。建议直接回答并稍作解释，避免使用不自然的短语如“my work”。

예시: I'm a postgraduate student, so I don't have a job at the moment.

제안: 回答中有重复词汇“there's there's”，句子不完整且表达不清晰。建议注意句子完整性和逻辑连贯，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: Yes, Shanghai is a great place to work because it is a major economic hub with plenty of job opportunities in industries like finance and technology. Additionally, the city offers convenient transportation and relatively fresh air.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，如“is very are very kindly”，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，注意主谓一致和形容词使用。

예시: Yes, I like living in Shanghai. The air is fresh, transportation is convenient, the surroundings are beautiful, and the people are very kind.

제안: 回答不完整且表达混乱，缺乏具体细节。建议明确表达未来计划，使用完整句子并提供具体例子。

예시: Since I major in Communication Engineering, I plan to work in related fields such as telecommunications or network engineering after graduation.

× I'm looking forward to graduating next year and start my career in the communication engineering.

✓ I'm looking forward to graduating next year and starting my career in communication engineering.

这里涉及动词形式的使用，'look forward to'后面应接动名词形式，因此应将'start'改为'starting'。另外，'the communication engineering'中不需要定冠词'the'，应为'communication engineering'。

× I'm a post graduate student so I don't have my work.

✓ I'm a postgraduate student so I don't have a job.

'my work'用法不当，通常表达工作时用'job'，且不加物主代词'my'。应改为'I don't have a job'。

× Yes, Shanghai is a good place for working because it's a major economic hub.

✓ Yes, Shanghai is a good place to work because it's a major economic hub.

'a good place for working'中'for working'不自然，习惯用法是'a good place to work'。

× There's there's plenty of job opportunities, industry like finance and technology.

✓ There are plenty of job opportunities in industries like finance and technology.

句子结构混乱，'There's there's'重复，'industry'应为复数'industries'，且需要介词'in'引导行业范围。

× Additionally, the city has convenient transportation and fresh air since.

✓ Additionally, the city has convenient transportation and fresh air.

句尾'since'使用不当，缺少时间状语，且句意完整，应去掉'since'。

× Yes, of course. I live in Shanghai and the air is fresh, the transportation is convenient and the surroundings are very beautiful, and the people live in there is very are very kindly.

✓ Yes, of course. I live in Shanghai and the air is fresh, the transportation is convenient, the surroundings are very beautiful, and the people living there are very kind.

'the people live in there is very are very kindly'语法错误，主谓不一致，'kindly'应为形容词'kind'，且'live in there'应改为'living there'。

× Well, since I major in communication engineering, I decided to I plan to work about relevant works and for example.

✓ Well, since I major in communication engineering, I plan to work in related fields, for example.

句子结构混乱，'decided to I plan to'重复且不完整，'work about relevant works'表达不当，应改为'work in related fields'。