Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ должен быть более естественным и грамматически правильным. Следует использовать правильные предлоги и структуру предложения, например, 'I am a second-year bachelor student at Thermostat Pedagogical Institute.'

예시: I am currently a second-year bachelor student at the Thermostat Pedagogical Institute.

제안: Ответ не соответствует вопросу и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует прямо ответить, что вы не работаете, и использовать связующие слова для плавности.

예시: I don't work at the moment because I am fully focused on my studies at the institute.

제안: Ответ не ясен и не соответствует вопросу. Следует объяснить, что вы не работаете, поэтому не можете судить о месте работы.

예시: I am not currently working, so I cannot say whether it is a good place to work or not.

제안: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать правильные конструкции и связующие слова для ясности.

예시: Yes, I would definitely like the place where I work because a comfortable workplace with good equipment can significantly boost my productivity and motivation.

제안: Ответ содержит ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Следует использовать правильные фразы и связующие слова для логичности.

예시: After I graduate with my bachelor's degree, I plan to pursue a master's degree, and while studying, I would like to teach at private schools.

× I am a student on the Thermostat Pedagogical Institute on my second year of my bachelor degree.

✓ I am a student at the Thermostat Pedagogical Institute in my second year of my bachelor's degree.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'Thermostat Pedagogical Institute' and 'my second year'. The correct prepositions are 'at' for institutions and 'in' for years of study. Also, 'bachelor degree' should be possessive as 'bachelor's degree'.

× At the moment I am a student or an institute so I don't have any time for work, so all my attention on study.

✓ At the moment I am a student at an institute so I don't have any time for work, so all my attention is on studying.

The phrase 'student or an institute' is incorrect; it should be 'student at an institute'. Also, 'all my attention on study' lacks the verb 'is' and 'study' should be in gerund form 'studying' after a preposition.

× Yes, I would like definitely like the place where I work. I comfortable with equipment workplace can significantly boost my productivity and motivation.

✓ Yes, I would definitely like the place where I work. I am comfortable with the equipment; the workplace can significantly boost my productivity and motivation.

The sentence lacks the verb 'am' after 'I' to form 'I am comfortable'. Also, 'equipment workplace' is unclear and needs a conjunction or punctuation to separate ideas. 'Definitely' should be placed before 'like' for correct adverb placement.

× When I graduate my bachelor degree, I want to take my document to master's degree and while I am learning a master's degree, I want to teach in the private schools.

✓ When I graduate with my bachelor's degree, I want to apply for a master's degree and while I am studying for my master's degree, I want to teach in private schools.

The phrase 'graduate my bachelor degree' needs the preposition 'with' and possessive form 'bachelor's degree'. 'Take my document to master's degree' is incorrect; 'apply for a master's degree' is appropriate. 'Learning a master's degree' should be 'studying for my master's degree'. Also, 'the private schools' should be 'private schools' without 'the'.