Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and directly responds to the question, which is good. However, to improve, try to add a little more detail about your studies or what you enjoy about being a student to make your answer more engaging and natural. Also, avoid starting with filler words like 'Well' unnecessarily.

예시: I am currently a student at Cambridge International School, where I am focusing on science subjects because I enjoy learning about how things work.

제안: Your answer is unclear and does not directly answer the question. Try to respond directly by stating your workplace or if you do not work, say so clearly. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

예시: I do not currently work because I am focusing on my studies, but I help my family by managing our finances at home.

제안: Your answer is difficult to understand due to grammar and vocabulary errors. To improve, clearly state your opinion about the workplace and provide specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: Yes, it is a good place to work because the company cares about its employees. For example, they offer bonuses and support that help boost our confidence.

제안: Your answer has several grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. To improve, respond directly with a clear opinion and support it with specific examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: Yes, I like the place where I work because the manager takes care of our basic needs. For instance, he often provides snacks and sweets, which makes the workplace comfortable.

제안: Your answer is very unclear and fragmented. To improve, try to give a clear and complete response about your future work plans. Use full sentences and connect your ideas logically.

예시: In the future, I plan to continue my studies in business management because I hope to set up my own company one day.

× I vote for the financial needs of my family because I am the only person in the family who can financially work and and my family can become so strong financial.

✓ I work to support the financial needs of my family because I am the only person in the family who can earn money, and my family can become financially strong.

The phrase 'vote for the financial needs' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'work to support' or 'earn for'. Also, 'strong financial' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'financially strong'. The prepositions and word choices were inappropriate, leading to confusion.

× Yes, it is a very good place to work for sleep. The care about employee is very good return by the implies. Moreover, they offer various bonus and. Steps to the employees to their confident can be boost.

✓ Yes, it is a very good place to work. The care for employees is very good as shown by the employers. Moreover, they offer various bonuses and steps to employees so their confidence can be boosted.

The phrase 'work for sleep' is incorrect; it should be 'work'. 'Care about employee' should be 'care for employees'. 'Return by the implies' is unclear and corrected to 'as shown by the employers'. 'Bonus and. Steps' is incomplete and corrected to 'bonuses and steps'. Prepositions and word forms were misused.

× Of course, I like the place where I broke. It is a very good place to work. Even the basic needs of employees is very fully absorbed by the manager, and he often offered sweets, snacks and some foods to the managers, so the employees can be a.

✓ Of course, I like the place where I work. It is a very good place to work. Even the basic needs of employees are fully met by the manager, and he often offers sweets, snacks, and some food to the employees, so the employees can be happy.

'Where I broke' is incorrect; it should be 'where I work'. 'Basic needs of employees is' should be 'are' to agree in number. 'Fully absorbed by the manager' is incorrect; 'fully met' is appropriate. 'Offered' should be 'offers' to match present tense. 'Some foods' should be 'some food'. 'To the managers' should be 'to the employees'. The sentence was unclear due to incorrect prepositions and word choices.

× To be honest, my future plans are about. And study in a stream named as Gomez. I am very hopeful. Christmas. Set up my own business. Regarding. Dear sweet, that's why. Go to upload so I can extend.

✓ To be honest, my future plans are to study in a stream named Gomez. I am very hopeful to set up my own business. That is why I want to go abroad so I can expand my opportunities.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack clear structure. Phrases like 'my future plans are about' and 'Regarding. Dear sweet' are incomplete and unclear. The correction combines ideas into coherent sentences, correcting sentence fragments and improving clarity.