Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as 'becaused' and 'in US my technical abilities'. Also, 'father career' seems to be a mistake. Try to make your sentences clear and concise, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Currently, I am a student studying computer software development. These classes help me improve my technical skills and practical knowledge. Additionally, they teach problem-solving techniques, which I believe will be very useful in my future career.

제안: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as 'I'm not full time student' and 'It will be help me'. Try to use correct grammar and clearer sentence structures. Also, use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

예시: I am not working at the moment because I am a full-time student pursuing a degree in computer technology. However, I plan to start working in this field once I complete my studies, so I can gain practical experience and apply what I have learned.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains a question at the end which is unnecessary. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'are' twice. Try to make your answer more direct and fluent, using linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: As I am not currently employed, I cannot comment on a specific workplace. However, I believe a good place to work should have a friendly environment and offer opportunities for growth, which are important factors for me when considering a job.

제안: Your answer is confusing and contains repeated words like 'our our' and unclear phrases such as 'according to me or I concede that place'. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid redundancy. Use simple and direct sentences with proper linking words.

예시: As I mentioned earlier, I am not currently employed. However, I believe that a workplace with a friendly environment and good opportunities for growth would be very beneficial for me.

제안: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'I'm a person is about creativity and technology' and 'all in courses to announce my school'. Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Also, provide more specific details about your plans using linking words.

예시: In the future, I plan to pursue a career in digital marketing because I am interested in creativity and technology. To prepare for this, I intend to gain experience through internships and take relevant courses after finishing my studies.

× Currently I am a student. I am taking classes in computer software development becaused they help me in US my technical abilities and improve my practical knowledge.

✓ Currently I am a student. I am taking classes in computer software development because they help me improve my technical abilities and practical knowledge.

The word 'becaused' is incorrect; the correct form is 'because'. Also, 'help me in US my technical abilities' is incorrect; it should be 'help me improve my technical abilities'. The error is related to incorrect word usage and sentence structure, which affects clarity.

× Apart from that these classes also teach me problem solving techniques which I believe will be very useful in my father career.

✓ Apart from that, these classes also teach me problem-solving techniques which I believe will be very useful in my future career.

The phrase 'my father career' is incorrect; it should be 'my future career'. This is a singular and plural issue and incorrect word choice. Also, 'problem solving' should be hyphenated as 'problem-solving' when used as an adjective.

× I'm not working at present 'cause I'm not full time student pursuing my graduation in computer technical skills.

✓ I'm not working at present because I'm not a full-time student pursuing my graduation in computer technical skills.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'full-time student' and 'full time' should be hyphenated as 'full-time'. Also, 'cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate. This is a sentence structure and article usage error.

× However, I plan to start working in the field of once I complete my studies.

✓ However, I plan to start working in the field once I complete my studies.

The phrase 'in the field of once' is incorrect; 'of' is unnecessary here. This is a sentence structure error causing confusion.

× It will be help me gain practical experience and apply what I have learned.

✓ It will help me gain practical experience and apply what I have learned.

The phrase 'will be help me' is incorrect; it should be 'will help me'. This is a sentence structure error involving auxiliary verb misuse.

× Where do you work?>

✓ Where do you work?

The sentence ends with an incorrect character '>'. It should end with a question mark. This is a punctuation error affecting sentence structure.

× Are these factors are important to me when considering a job?

✓ These factors are important to me when considering a job.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'Are' twice. The correct form is a statement, not a question. This is an incorrect conjunction and sentence structure error.

× As I already mentioned that I'm not employed at the moment, but according to me or I concede that place is very beneficial for work, which are our our friendly environment and are good opportunities for growth.

✓ As I already mentioned, I'm not employed at the moment, but I believe that a place with a friendly environment and good opportunities for growth is very beneficial for work.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun usage ('according to me or I concede'), repeated words ('our our'), and incorrect verb agreement ('which are'). This is an incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure error.

× In the future, I plan to pursue our career in digital marketing 'cause I'm a person is about creativity and technology.

✓ In the future, I plan to pursue my career in digital marketing because I am a person interested in creativity and technology.

The pronoun 'our' is incorrect; it should be 'my'. Also, 'a person is about creativity' is incorrect; it should be 'a person interested in creativity'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and sentence structure error.

× I am to gain more experience through internships and all in courses to announce my school.

✓ I plan to gain more experience through internships and online courses to enhance my skills.

The original sentence is unclear and contains errors like 'all in courses' and 'announce my school'. This is a sentence structure error affecting clarity and meaning.