Work— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应避免重复和犹豫，语言应更流畅自然。可以直接陈述身份和专业，避免多余的填充词。

예시: I am a student majoring in marine science at Ocean University.

제안: 回答不清晰且语法错误较多，应直接回答工作地点，并用简洁明了的句子描述环境。

예시: I work near the ocean in a beautiful city surrounded by the sea and clear blue skies.

제안: 回答应更有条理，使用连接词表达原因，避免语法错误，清楚说明优缺点。

예시: I don't think it's a good place to work because the wages are low and the traffic is very crowded.

제안: 回答应更连贯，避免重复，清楚表达喜欢和不喜欢的方面，并用连接词衔接。

예시: I have mixed feelings about the place where I work. I like the beautiful environment and blue skies, but I dislike the crowded traffic and local culture.

제안: 回答应简洁明了，避免语法混乱，清楚表达未来计划和感受。

예시: After I graduate, I plan to continue studying, although I feel a bit worried about my future because it seems challenging.

× Yeah, no, I'm a student. Yeah. So I'm majoring in marine science and starting in the condo Ocean University. Yeah, so.

✓ Yeah, no, I'm a student. Yeah. So I'm majoring in marine science and studying at the Condo Ocean University. Yeah, so.

这里的 'starting in the condo Ocean University' 语法错误，应该用现在进行时表示正在学习，且介词应为 'at' 表示在某个学校学习。

× I understand it is a ocean which is located and so changing stated preference is a very beautiful city where it's rounding worries, see and yeah, it's your high. So very beautiful sky and beautiful.

✓ I understand it is an ocean city which is located in a very beautiful place where it's surrounded by the sea and yeah, it has a high sky. So very beautiful sky and beautiful.

原句中介词使用混乱，'located and so changing stated preference' 无意义，应该用 'located in' 表示位置，'surrounded by the sea' 表示被海洋包围。

× Yeah, I think it's not a good price to work Yeah, firstly 0 or the local people had hasn't good wage. Yeah, the the press is so long and the narrator another rating is the traffic is so crowded Yeah.

✓ Yeah, I think it's not a good place to work. Yeah, firstly, the local people don't have good wages. Yeah, the pressure is so long and another problem is the traffic is so crowded. Yeah.

'price' 应为 'place'，'had hasn't good wage' 语法错误，应该用复数 'wages'，且时态应为现在时。

× I think half and half dollars in. I like the environmental in the environment yet. They are so beautiful Environment end Blue sky is a beautiful city, but I really don't like so local culture yet 'cause the traffic is too crowded, everyone has them.

✓ I think it's half and half. I like the environment. It is so beautiful. The environment and blue sky make it a beautiful city, but I really don't like the local culture because the traffic is too crowded, and everyone has them.

'environmental in the environment' 用词错误，应为 'environment'，'so local culture yet' 语法不通，改为 'the local culture'，'everyone has them' 不明确，需改为更清晰表达。

× Yeah, I think after I graduated I will be. Steel. Study and. Wanted to Godzilla monster deployed so I think it's a very hard thing for me. Now I am little I'm little bit worried about my future so but it's not fine.

✓ Yeah, I think after I graduate I will still study and want to get a good job. So I think it's a very hard thing for me. Now I am a little bit worried about my future, but it's fine.

'after I graduated' 应用一般现在时 'after I graduate' 表示将来时间，'will be. Steel. Study' 语法错误，改为 'will still study'，'Wanted to Godzilla monster deployed' 无意义，改为 'want to get a good job'。