Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答えは肯定で始まっていて意図は伝わりますが、文法と語順の誤り、冗長な表現、具体性の欠如があります。次の点を直してください：1) 文法を正しくし、自然な表現にする（例："I feel uplifted when I buy something new"）。2) 内容は簡潔に5文以内に収める。3) どんな買い物が好きか具体例を一つ挙げる。4) 接続語を使って論理を明確にする（例："because"）。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy shopping because buying something new, like clothes or kitchenware, makes me feel uplifted. For example, a new dress can boost my confidence. I usually prefer browsing shops on weekends. Overall, shopping is a pleasant way for me to relax.

提案: 回答は直接的だが語法と語順のミス、繰り返し、具体性不足が目立ちます。改善点：1) 自然な理由表現を使う（"because"で理由を明確に）。2) 単数・複数や冠詞を正しく使う（"shops"→"shops"は可だが"when I go shopping"が自然）。3) 具体的な状況や例（どんな商品で特に比較するか）を加える。4) 文を簡潔にまとめる。

例: Yes, I do. When I go shopping, I always compare prices because I want to save money. For example, I check prices of smartphones and grocery items online before buying. This helps me choose the best value for my budget.

提案: 答えは簡潔だが表現が不自然で意味がやや曖昧です。改善点：1) 「比較できない」理由を明確に述べる（例：見た目だけでは品質が分からない）。2) 専門語の誤用を避ける（"cost performance"は"value for money"が自然）。3) 接続詞で因果関係をはっきりさせる。4) 具体例を一つ示すと説得力が増す。

例: Yes, it can be. I often find it hard to judge product quality from appearance alone, so I can't tell whether a higher price really means better quality. For instance, when choosing headphones, it's difficult to know sound quality without testing them. Therefore, I usually read reviews before buying.

提案: 答えが単純で根拠がなく、断定的すぎます。改善点：1) 一般化を避け、バランスのある見解を述べる（例："sometimes"や"often"を使う）。2) 理由や具体例を挙げて主張を裏付ける（品質やブランド保証など）。3) 文法を整え、冗長な断片文を避ける。

例: I don't think expensive products are always better. While pricier items often have higher quality or better materials, that's not always the case. For example, a mid-range smartphone may offer similar features to a flagship model at a lower price. So I evaluate products based on reviews and features rather than price alone.

× I'm really looking forward to go there.

✓ I'm really looking forward to going there.

'look forward to' is a phrasal verb followed by a noun or verb in -ing form; therefore 'to go' should be 'to going'. Suggestion: Use 'looking forward to' + gerund: 'looking forward to going'. Rest of sentence is fine.

× When I go shops I will compare the price of each product.

✓ When I go shopping I compare the price of each product.

The verb 'go' requires the gerund 'shopping' or the preposition 'to' plus a place; 'go shops' is incorrect. Also present simple suits habitual actions better than 'will'. Suggestion: Use 'go shopping' and present simple for habitual actions: 'When I go shopping I compare...'.

× I want to purchase more inexpensive one because I want to save my money not to select expensive one I want to.

✓ I want to buy the cheaper one because I want to save money, not choose the expensive one.

'more inexpensive' is awkward; use 'cheaper' or 'less expensive'. 'One' needs an article when referring to a noun: 'the cheaper one'. The sentence also had redundancy and incorrect word order. Suggestion: Use comparative 'cheaper' and simplify: 'I want to buy the cheaper one to save money, not the expensive one.'

× When I go to the shops, I can't compare the quality of products and it responds to the prices, so I can't distinct the appropriate or cost performance of the product.

✓ When I go to the shops, I can't compare the quality of products with their prices, so I can't judge the value-for-money of a product.

'responds to the prices' is incorrect; use 'compare ... with' to link quality and price. 'distinct' is the wrong verb; 'distinguish' or 'judge' works. 'cost performance' is unnatural in English; use 'value-for-money'. Suggestion: Use 'compare X with Y', 'judge' or 'distinguish', and natural phrase 'value-for-money'.

× Expensive products are. Are very good for various means and in quality, quantity and the looks.

✓ Yes, I do. Expensive products are often better in quality, appearance, and sometimes quantity.

The original contains a sentence fragment 'Expensive products are.' and then an ungrammatical 'Are very good...'. Also 'for various means' is unclear and 'the looks' is incorrect; use 'appearance' or 'looks'. Suggestion: Combine into one sentence and use clear nouns: 'Expensive products are often better in quality, appearance, and sometimes quantity.'

× When I go shops I will compare the price of each product.

✓ When I go shopping I compare the prices of each product.

'shops' vs 'shopping' addressed earlier; additionally 'the price' vs 'prices' — when talking about multiple products use plural 'prices'. Suggestion: Use 'prices' when referring to multiple items: 'I compare the prices of each product.'

× I can change my mind and make me boosted when I purchase a new thing or brand new clothes, dishes and drinks.

✓ I can change my mind and feel excited when I buy something new, like clothes, dishes, or drinks.

'make me boosted' is incorrect; use 'feel excited' or 'be excited'. 'Purchase' is formal but acceptable; 'buy' is more natural. 'a new thing' is vague; 'something new' is better. Also parallel list punctuation improved. Suggestion: Use natural verbs and expressions: 'I can change my mind and feel excited when I buy something new, such as clothes, dishes, or drinks.'

× I want to purchase more inexpensive one because I want to save my money not to select expensive one I want to.

✓ I want to buy the cheaper one because I want to save money and not choose the expensive one.

Mixed modals and infinitives make the sentence unnatural. Use present simple 'want to buy' and 'not choose'. Also 'my money' is unnecessary; 'money' suffices. Suggestion: Keep consistent present tense and simpler phrasing: 'I want to buy the cheaper one to save money, not choose the expensive one.'

× Expensive products are. Are very good for various means and in quality, quantity and the looks.

✓ Expensive products are often better in quality, quantity, and appearance.

Fragmented sentences and misplaced verb 'Are' caused subject-verb troubles; merging fixes agreement. Use plural noun forms consistently. Suggestion: Maintain subject-verb structure: 'Expensive products are often better...'.