Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ естественный, но есть грамматические ошибки, повторы и нечеткая структура. Уменьшите повторы («I I», «buying... buying»), используйте одно-двухпредложение с основной идеей, затем добавьте одно-два конкретных подробных примера. Следите за правильным порядком слов: «buying things for myself» вместо «buying it for myself».

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping. I especially like browsing displays and comparing prices because I find it interesting to analyze value. For instance, when I shop for clothes I check fabric quality and price tags to decide if a piece is worth buying.

提案: Ответ показывает причину, но содержит ошибки в грамматике и словообразовании («like to economics», «best by the PR cheapest 1»). Дайте чёткую тему («Yes, I compare prices») и используйте связки («because», «so») для логики. Приводите конкретный пример процесса сравнения и результат.

例: Yes, I always compare prices because I dislike overpaying. For example, I check several online stores and local shops, compare features and prices, and choose the option that offers the best quality for the lowest price.

提案: Хорошо, что даёте причины и пример поведения, но много повторов и разговорных вставок («uh», «it's it's»). Сформулируйте ответ короче: тема, причина, конкретный пример, заключение. Уберите лишние фразы и исправьте времена («I have a low budget, so I don’t buy much»).

例: Yes, I often find it hard to choose. Because I have a limited budget, I ask friends for advice by sending photos, which sometimes delays my decision. For example, I can send three photos and wait for their opinions before buying.

提案: Ясный мнение и пример, но есть проблемы с артиклями, предлогами и окончанием предложения. Дайте более структурированный ответ: прямой ответ, причина и ясный пример. Избегайте незаконченых фраз и уточняйте сравнение («from China», «cheaper by five to ten times»).

例: No, I don't think expensive items are always better. For example, in Kazakhstan many goods are imported from China and sold at much higher prices, sometimes five to ten times more, so I often buy directly from Chinese marketplaces where the same products are cheaper.

× Buying some stuff with yourself, it's really fun.

✓ Buying some stuff by yourself is really fun.

The gerund phrase should use 'by yourself' (correct preposition) and not a comma splice; also remove the unnecessary comma. Use 'by' for doing something alone. In Russian: 'Фраза герундия должна использовать «by yourself» (правильный предлог) и не иметь лишней запятой; также удалите лишнюю запятую.'

× I I find it fun even just looking at the things that are being sold.

✓ I find it fun just to look at the things that are being sold.

Use infinitive 'to look' or gerund without extra markers; 'even just' is redundant. Also remove duplicated 'I'. In Russian: 'Используйте инфинитив «to look» или герундий без лишних слов; уберите дублирование «I».'

× I just like to look at the prices, analyze them and buying it for myself makes it even more interesting for me.

✓ I just like to look at the prices, analyze them, and buying things for myself makes it even more interesting.

Maintain parallel structure: after two infinitives ('to look', 'analyze') the third element should align; here use 'buying things' or better 'and buying things for myself' to keep grammatical consistency. In Russian: 'Сохраните параллельную структуру: после двух инфинитивов третий элемент должен соответствовать; используйте «buying things» или «and buying things for myself».'

× I think I'm financially smart and I really like to economics and money.

✓ I think I'm financially smart and I really like economics and money.

Use the noun 'economics' not the verb phrase 'to economics'. Remove unnecessary 'to'. In Russian: 'Используйте существительное «economics», а не глагольную конструкцию «to economics».'

× I don't like when I spend the money on something uh overpriced.

✓ I don't like when I spend money on something that's overpriced.

Remove the article 'the' before uncountable 'money' and add a relative clause 'that's' to modify 'something'. In Russian: 'Уберите артикль «the» перед неисчисляемым «money» и добавьте относительное предложение «that's» для уточнения.'

× So I like to compare prices in a lot of shops and buy the best by the PR cheapest 1.

✓ So I like to compare prices at many shops and buy the cheapest one.

Use 'at' or 'in' many shops; 'a lot of' replaced by 'many' for formality; correct phrase 'the cheapest one'. Remove unclear 'by the PR cheapest 1'. In Russian: 'Используйте «at many shops»; замените «a lot of» на «many»; исправьте на «the cheapest one» и уберите непонятную часть.'

× Yes, I can't stand in front of one option for like 1-2 hours.

✓ Yes, I can't stand in front of one option for like one or two hours.

Write numbers in words in speech and keep present tense; this sentence is acceptable but numbers should be spelled out if desired. In Russian: 'Напишите числа словами и сохраните настоящее время; предложение в целом корректно.'

× I write my friends, I send the photos, I ask them uh is it a good choice or not?

✓ I write to my friends, send them photos, and ask if it's a good choice or not.

Use 'write to' with indirect object and streamline pronoun references; use 'ask if it's' rather than 'ask them is it'. In Russian: 'Используйте «write to» для косвенного дополнения и упростите местоимения; используйте «ask if it's», а не «ask them is it».'

× It's it's really hard for me to make a choice.

✓ It's really hard for me to make a choice.

Remove duplicated 'it's'. In Russian: 'Уберите повторяющийся «it's». '

× Maybe because I have a low budget and I I will not buy a lot of stuff or maybe it's just my character.

✓ Maybe because I have a low budget and I won't buy a lot of stuff, or maybe it's just my personality.

Contract 'will not' to 'won't' for natural speech and remove duplicated 'I'. 'Character' better replaced by 'personality' for clarity. In Russian: 'Сократите «will not» до «won't», уберите дублирование «I»; «personality» яснее, чем «character».'

× For example I live in Kazakhstan and everything is too overpriced in my country.

✓ For example, I live in Kazakhstan, and everything in my country is overpriced.

Add commas for clarity and avoid 'too overpriced' redundancy; 'overpriced' alone suffices. In Russian: 'Добавьте запятые для ясности и уберите избыточное «too overpriced»; достаточно «overpriced».'

× They just bring the things from the China where it's way cheaper like for 5-10 times.

✓ They just bring things from China where it's way cheaper, like five to ten times cheaper.

Do not use 'the' before country name 'China'; use numbers in words and repeat 'cheaper' for clarity. In Russian: 'Не используйте «the» перед названием страны; числа лучше словами, и повторите «cheaper» для ясности.'

× And I'd like to buy stuff in China marketplace rather than in.

✓ And I'd like to buy stuff on Chinese marketplaces rather than locally.

Use 'on' for online marketplaces, 'Chinese' adjective form, and complete the comparison 'rather than locally' to finish the sentence. In Russian: 'Используйте «on» для онлайн-площадок, форму прилагательного «Chinese» и завершите сравнение, например «rather than locally».'