Shopping— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ неестественен и содержит повторы и слова-паразиты. Нужно давать более плавное вступление и конкретизировать причину: назвать, что именно нравится (стиль, ассортимент, процесс поиска). Уберите повторы («I really love shopping») и «uh», замените «sayings» на подходящее слово («accessories» или «shoes»). Формат: 1 тема + 1–2 уточняющих предложения (макс. 5).

例: Yes, I enjoy shopping because I like discovering new styles and choosing clothes that suit me. I particularly enjoy browsing for accessories and trying different outfits, which makes the experience fun rather than a chore.

提案: Ответ расплывчат и содержит лишние фразы («I do it and I think it's true»). Нужно прямо сказать, что вы сравниваете, и объяснить почему: экономия, соотношение цена/качество. Добавьте связующее слово (e.g., "because", "so") и конкретный пример. Старайтесь избегать незаконченных фраз. Максимум 3 предложений.

例: Yes, I always compare prices because I want good value for money. For example, I check different stores and online shops to find the best price for a jacket before I buy it.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и бессмысленные фразы («make education»), а также междометия. Нужно чётко сформулировать тему: "No, it's not difficult" + причина и пример. Уберите лишние слова и завершите мысль. Используйте связки («because», «so», «for example").

例: No, it's not difficult for me to choose because I usually know what I need and quickly compare price and quality. For example, when buying a shirt I check the fabric and fit, so I can decide within a few minutes.

提案: Ответ слишком категоричен, содержит повторы и неверную лексику («it's very quiet»), а также многочисленные паузы. Лучше выразить мнение сбалансированно: признать, что дорогие вещи часто качественнее, но не всегда, и привести критерии оценки (материал, гарантия). Используйте ровную структуру: мнение + причина + пример/ограничение.

例: I don't think expensive products are always better; often they have higher quality materials and better workmanship, but price doesn't guarantee value. For example, I may buy a mid-range jacket that fits well and lasts longer than a pricier one with poor stitching.

× Yes I do. I like shopping because it's interesting for myself and I like buying different clothes or sayings. Uh, and I really love shopping.

✓ Yes, I do. I like shopping because I find it interesting, and I like buying different clothes or accessories. I really love shopping.

The phrase 'for myself' is unnecessary and unnatural; use 'I find it interesting'. 'Sayings' is incorrect for items of clothing; possible intended word is 'accessories'. Also add commas for clarity. Use consistent subject 'I' and complete noun phrases.

× Yes, I do it and I think it's true because I sometimes compare prices when I shop.

✓ Yes, I do that, and I think it's true because I sometimes compare prices when I shop.

Replace 'do it' with 'do that' for clarity. 'Do that' is a better pronoun reference to the action. Ensure conjunction 'and' connects clauses smoothly.

× It's crucial for me and I choose different clothes and look at things or.

✓ It's crucial for me; I choose different clothes and look at various items.

Original sentence ends abruptly with 'or' and has awkward coordination. Remove 'or' and replace 'things' with 'items' or 'various items' for clarity. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join related ideas.

× No, it's not difficult for me to make choose when I shop, I usually know what I need and compare price and quality quickly.

✓ No, it's not difficult for me to choose when I shop; I usually know what I need and compare price and quality quickly.

Incorrect verb phrase 'make choose' should be 'choose'. Use semicolon instead of comma splice. 'Compare price and quality' is acceptable but consider plural 'prices' for consistency.

× So, uh, make education without much worry.

✓ So I make decisions without much worry.

'Make education' is incorrect; likely meant 'make decisions'. Use the noun 'decisions' with verb 'make'. Remove filler 'uh' for clearer speech.

× For example, when I buy clothes, I choose a different, uh, things and I.

✓ For example, when I buy clothes, I choose different items.

Phrase 'a different, uh, things and I' is ungrammatical. Remove 'a' and 'and I', and use 'different items' as correct plural noun phrase.

× In my opinion, uh, expensive products always better than cheaper ones because, uh, cheaper clothes, it's cheap and it's not quality and uh, expensive products.

✓ In my opinion, expensive products are always better than cheaper ones because cheaper clothes are low-quality, while expensive products are better made.

Missing verb 'are' after 'products'. 'It's not quality' is incorrect — use 'are low-quality' or 'are not of good quality'. Clarify comparison by contrasting clauses and remove fillers.

× When I buy clothes, it's very quiet and it's very comfortable clothes for me.

✓ When I buy clothes, I prefer clothes that are very light and very comfortable for me.

'It's very quiet' is incorrect adjective for clothes; likely intended 'light' or 'soft'. Also 'it's very comfortable clothes' mixes singular 'it' with plural 'clothes'; use 'I prefer clothes that are...'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct adjectives.