Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some unclear words and grammatical errors. Try to use clear and correct expressions, avoid redundancy, and keep your answer concise. For example, say "Yes, I like parties because they are fun and I enjoy spending time with my friends."

例: Yes, I like parties because they are fun and I enjoy spending time with my friends.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words. For example, "When I was a kid, I had parties mostly on my birthday or when my friends had their birthdays. Also, I sometimes went to weddings with my parents."

例: When I was a kid, I had parties mostly on my birthday or when my friends had their birthdays. Also, I sometimes went to weddings with my parents.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear and contains some mistakes and hesitations. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, use linking words, and avoid unnecessary words. For example, "Yes, I usually organize a party on my birthday. I go out with my friends or family to a restaurant where we enjoy delicious food. Then, we sing Happy Birthday and celebrate together."

例: Yes, I usually organize a party on my birthday. I go out with my friends or family to a restaurant where we enjoy delicious food. Then, we sing Happy Birthday and celebrate together.

× Tease yes, I like parties because it's very fun and I can smell spend my time with my friends.

✓ Yes, I like parties because they are very fun and I can spend my time with my friends.

The original sentence contains the incorrect pronoun 'Tease' which seems to be a mishearing or typo. Also, 'it's' should be 'they are' to agree with the plural noun 'parties'. The phrase 'I can smell spend my time' is incorrect; 'smell' is unnecessary and should be removed to correct the sentence.

× Uh, when I was young, when I have uh, a body is uh, uh, is my birthday or that day is uh, birthday friends or I or I can umm, uh, go with my parents to some party like marriage.

✓ Uh, when I was young, when I had a party, it was my birthday or a friend's birthday, or I could go with my parents to some party like a wedding.

The sentence has multiple tense errors: 'have' should be 'had' to match past tense. 'Body' is a mispronunciation of 'party'. 'Is' should be replaced with 'it was' to maintain past tense. 'Birthday friends' is unclear and corrected to 'a friend's birthday'. 'Can' should be 'could' to reflect past ability. 'Marriage' should be 'wedding' as the correct term for the event.

× Uh, yes, in my birthday I usually go out with my friends or with my family to go to the restaurant and eat many, uh, delicious food.

✓ Uh, yes, on my birthday I usually go out with my friends or family to a restaurant and eat a lot of delicious food.

The phrase 'in my birthday' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on'. 'Go to the restaurant' is better expressed as 'go to a restaurant' for generality. 'Eat many delicious food' is incorrect because 'food' is uncountable; it should be 'a lot of delicious food'.

× And after that I will buy a cat and uh, set and singing Happy Birthday.

✓ And after that, I will buy a cake and set up and sing Happy Birthday.

The word 'cat' is a mispronunciation of 'cake'. 'Set and singing' is incorrect; it should be 'set up and sing' to use the correct verb forms. The modal 'will' is acceptable here for future intention.