Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਠੀਕ ਹੈ ਪਰ ਕੁਝ ਗਲਤੀਆਂ ਹਨ ਜਿਵੇਂ ਕਿ 'that time' ਦੀ ਵਰਤੋਂ ਜੋ ਕੁਝ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਹੈ। ਤੁਸੀਂ ਜਵਾਬ ਨੂੰ ਹੋਰ ਕੁਦਰਤੀ ਅਤੇ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਬਣਾਉਣ ਲਈ ਸਧਾਰਨ ਅਤੇ ਸਹੀ ਵਾਕਾਂਸ਼ ਵਰਤ ਸਕਦੇ ਹੋ। ਉਦਾਹਰਨ ਵਜੋਂ, 'I enjoy spending time with my friends at parties, especially on weekends when I arrange them.'

例: Yes, I enjoy parties because I get to spend quality time with my friends. Especially on weekends, I often organize parties to relax and have fun together.

提案: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਅਤੇ ਸ਼ਬਦ ਚੋਣ ਵਿੱਚ ਕਾਫੀ ਗਲਤੀਆਂ ਹਨ ਜੋ ਅਰਥ ਨੂੰ ਸਮਝਣ ਵਿੱਚ ਮੁਸ਼ਕਲ ਪੈਦਾ ਕਰਦੀਆਂ ਹਨ। ਤੁਸੀਂ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਸਧਾਰਨ ਵਾਕਾਂਸ਼ਾਂ ਦੀ ਵਰਤੋਂ ਕਰਕੇ ਆਪਣੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਨੂੰ ਸੁਧਾਰ ਸਕਦੇ ਹੋ। ਜਵਾਬ ਨੂੰ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਤੌਰ 'ਤੇ ਸਿੱਧਾ ਅਤੇ ਸੰਖੇਪ ਰੱਖੋ।

例: When I was a kid, I used to have parties mainly on my birthday and after exams. I often organized small parties at my home to celebrate with my friends.

提案: ਤੁਹਾਡੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਵਿੱਚ ਵਾਕਾਂ ਦੀ ਬਣਤਰ ਅਤੇ ਸ਼ਬਦ ਚੋਣ ਵਿੱਚ ਗਲਤੀਆਂ ਹਨ ਜੋ ਜਵਾਬ ਨੂੰ ਅਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਬਣਾਉਂਦੀਆਂ ਹਨ। ਤੁਸੀਂ ਆਪਣੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਨੂੰ ਸਪਸ਼ਟ ਅਤੇ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਤੌਰ 'ਤੇ ਸਿੱਧਾ ਰੱਖੋ ਅਤੇ ਲਿੰਕਿੰਗ ਸ਼ਬਦ ਵਰਤ ਕੇ ਜਵਾਬ ਨੂੰ ਲਾਜ਼ਮੀ ਬਣਾਓ।

例: Yes, I have organized parties, especially on my birthdays. I take responsibility for planning because it makes me feel special to create memorable moments for my friends and family.

× Yes, I like parties because that time I enjoy with my friends.

✓ Yes, I like parties because at that time I enjoy spending time with my friends.

The phrase 'that time I enjoy with my friends' is incorrect because 'enjoy' needs an object or gerund form to complete the meaning. Also, 'that time' should be preceded by 'at' to indicate a specific time. Correct usage is 'at that time I enjoy spending time with my friends.'

× Especially in the weekend I arrange the parties and I spend some quality time with my friends.

✓ Especially on the weekend, I arrange parties and spend some quality time with my friends.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to 'the weekend'; the correct preposition is 'on'. Also, 'the parties' is better as 'parties' here because it refers to parties in general, not specific ones. Additionally, the sentence flows better without repeating 'I' before 'spend'.

× In my childhood is that time I arranged the party.

✓ In my childhood, I used to arrange parties.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'In my childhood is that time' is incorrect structure. The correct way is 'In my childhood, I used to arrange parties' to express habitual past actions.

× That time please have to celebrate my birthday and after the exam explain the sound quality time with my friends and I organized the small party at my home on that time.

✓ At that time, I used to celebrate my birthday and after exams, I spent quality time with my friends. I also organized small parties at my home then.

The original sentence has multiple issues: 'please have to celebrate' is incorrect; 'after the exam explain the sound quality time' is unclear and ungrammatical; 'on that time' should be 'at that time' or 'then'. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and uses proper prepositions and verb forms.

× Definitely, I organized the party, especially on my birthday.

✓ Definitely, I have organized parties, especially on my birthday.

Since the question is about experience up to now, present perfect tense 'have organized' is more appropriate than simple past 'organized'. Also, 'the party' should be plural 'parties' to indicate multiple occasions.

× I have organized the that occasion, but on the responsibilities because I feel very special when I have to.

✓ I have organized that occasion, taking on the responsibilities because I feel very special when I do so.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'The that occasion' is incorrect; 'on the responsibilities' is incorrect preposition usage; 'when I have to' is incomplete. The correction clarifies meaning and corrects structure.

× Only I'll create the same things for my friends and my family.

✓ I only create the same things for my friends and my family.

The original sentence misplaces 'only' and uses future tense 'I'll' which is inconsistent with the context. The corrected sentence uses present tense and places 'only' correctly to modify the verb.