Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบของคุณควรชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น ควรตอบตรงคำถามโดยใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำหรือคำที่ไม่ชัดเจน เช่น คำว่า 'clowned it and launched the' ที่ไม่เข้าใจได้ง่าย และควรอธิบายเหตุผลที่คุณไม่ชอบปาร์ตี้อย่างชัดเจน

例: I don't really like parties because I am an introverted person. I prefer quiet places where I can relax rather than loud and crowded events.

提案: คำตอบควรมีโครงสร้างที่ชัดเจนและใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม ควรตอบตรงคำถามและอธิบายบ่อยแค่ไหนที่คุณมีปาร์ตี้ในวัยเด็ก รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้ประโยคลื่นไหล เช่น 'usually' และ 'because' ควรแก้ไขคำผิดและประโยคที่ไม่สมบูรณ์

例: When I was a kid, I usually had parties with my family during special occasions. I enjoyed being around many people because it was fun and lively.

提案: คำตอบของคุณดีที่ตอบตรงคำถามและแสดงความตั้งใจในอนาคต แต่ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำซ้ำ ('opportunity opportunity') และทำให้ประโยคสมบูรณ์และเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น เช่น การใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่เหมาะสมและคำเชื่อม

例: No, I have never organized a party before. However, if I get the chance, I would like to organize one at least once in my life.

× Not that much for me I'd I'd like a place that clowned it and launched the because I'm introvert people so but it is not my point.

✓ Not that much for me. I'd like a place that is quiet and calm because I'm an introverted person, so parties are not my thing.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper sentence structure. 'Clowned it and launched the' is unclear and likely incorrect. Also, 'introvert people' should be 'an introverted person' to correctly describe oneself. The sentence needs to be broken into clearer parts to convey the intended meaning.

× On my shower I usually have a party with my families because when I was young I love to see people and I'm enjoying the place that. Have many people.

✓ On my birthday, I usually had a party with my family because when I was young, I loved to see people and enjoyed being in places with many people.

'On my shower' is incorrect; likely meant 'on my birthday'. 'Usually have' should be past tense 'usually had' to match 'when I was young'. 'Families' should be singular 'family'. 'I love' should be past tense 'I loved'. 'I'm enjoying' should be past tense 'I enjoyed'. The sentence also has incomplete parts that need to be connected properly.

× No, I haven't organized any party, but if I have an opportunity opportunity to do, I would like to organize it one time in my life.

✓ No, I haven't organized any party, but if I have an opportunity to do so, I would like to organize one at least once in my life.

The phrase 'if I have an opportunity opportunity to do' is repetitive and awkward. It should be 'if I have an opportunity to do so'. Also, 'organize it one time' is better expressed as 'organize one at least once'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.