Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answers more fluent and structured by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons or examples. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I really enjoy parties because they give me a chance to relax and have fun with friends. For example, during vacations, I always look forward to attending parties since I have more free time to prepare and enjoy myself.

提案: Focus on giving a clear and concise answer with proper sentence structure. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' to organize your supporting details. Try to be specific about frequency and types of parties you attended as a child.

例: When I was a kid, I often attended parties. For example, I was usually invited to my friends' birthday celebrations and sometimes to weddings of neighbors or relatives. I usually went to these events with my family.

提案: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Begin with a direct answer, then provide specific details about the party you organized, such as when it was, where, and what made it memorable. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

例: Yes, I have organized a party before. The first time was when I was 18 years old, and I invited all my friends to a nearby restaurant. We had a great time enjoying food and music, and I still remember how much fun we had together.

× because, uh, parties on vacation whenever we can

✓ because, uh, we party on vacation whenever we can

The original sentence uses 'parties' incorrectly as a verb in the present participle form. The correct verb form here is 'party' to indicate the action of attending or having parties. Using 'parties' as a verb is incorrect; 'party' is the base form used with 'we'. This correction clarifies the intended meaning.

× I otherwise I have, I don't have much time to do a makeup and ready for something

✓ otherwise, I don't have much time to do makeup and get ready for something

The phrase 'do a makeup' is incorrect; 'makeup' is an uncountable noun and does not require an article 'a'. Also, 'ready for something' should be 'get ready for something' to correctly use the verb phrase. This correction improves grammatical accuracy and natural phrasing.

× So whenever there is any party, then I always ready and I think it's the best time

✓ So whenever there is any party, I am always ready and I think it's the best time

The phrase 'I always ready' is missing the verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense. 'Ready' is an adjective and needs a linking verb. Adding 'am' corrects the sentence structure and tense.

× Well, then I was a kid then I always invited by my friends

✓ Well, when I was a kid, I was always invited by my friends

The original sentence lacks proper past tense structure and passive voice formation. 'I always invited by my friends' is incorrect; it should be 'I was always invited by my friends' to correctly use past passive voice. Also, 'then' is replaced with 'when' for clarity.

× so whenever anyone have a birthday so they invited me

✓ so whenever anyone has a birthday, they invite me

The subject 'anyone' is singular and requires the verb 'has' instead of 'have'. Also, to maintain tense consistency, 'invited' is changed to 'invite' to match the habitual action implied by 'whenever'. This correction addresses subject-verb agreement and tense consistency.

× and sometime when their marriage occasions in like in the our neighbors or like in the relatives so they invited us

✓ and sometimes when there are marriage occasions, like with our neighbors or relatives, they invite us

'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Marriage occasions' is plural and requires 'there are' to introduce the existence. 'In the our neighbors' is incorrect; it should be 'with our neighbors'. Also, 'invited' is changed to 'invite' for present habitual action. These corrections improve grammar and clarity.

× So I always go with my family

✓ So I always went with my family

The question asks about past events ('when you were a kid'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Go' is present tense; 'went' is the correct past tense form. This correction aligns the verb tense with the time frame.

× Yes Sir, I also recognize the party 9 times

✓ Yes Sir, I have also organized parties 9 times

'Recognize' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'organized'. Also, 'the party' should be plural 'parties' to match '9 times'. The present perfect tense 'have organized' is appropriate to indicate experience up to now.

× first time I organize the party

✓ the first time I organized the party

The phrase refers to a past event, so the past tense 'organized' is required instead of present tense 'organize'. Adding 'the' before 'first time' is also necessary for correct article usage.

× I invited all my friends in a nearest restaurant

✓ I invited all my friends to the nearest restaurant

The correct preposition for indicating destination is 'to', not 'in'. Also, 'a nearest' is incorrect; 'the nearest' is correct because 'nearest' is a superlative adjective requiring the definite article 'the'.

× we enjoyed a lot as well as very fun together

✓ we enjoyed a lot and had a lot of fun together

The phrase 'as well as very fun together' is ungrammatical. 'Had a lot of fun' is the correct expression to describe enjoying oneself. Also, 'and' is the appropriate conjunction to connect the ideas.

× I always remember that time that we spent with my friends

✓ I always remember the time that we spent with my friends

'That time' should be 'the time' to specify a particular time. The rest of the sentence is correct. This correction improves article usage and clarity.