Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: この回答は文法的な誤りや不自然な表現が含まれています。例えば、「to be on parties」ではなく「to be at parties」が自然です。また、理由を述べる際に「because those party instantly pushed up my mind and」という部分は意味が不明瞭で、より具体的で明確な表現に改善しましょう。5文以内で簡潔に答え、接続詞を使って論理的に話す練習をしてください。

例: Yes, I enjoy attending parties, especially when many energetic and close friends are there. They make the atmosphere lively and fun, which instantly lifts my mood.

提案: この回答は文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば、「we would have a party for a party within a month」は不自然で、「we used to have a party once a month」のように言い換えましょう。また、「cheer up us」ではなく「cheer us up」が正しいです。接続詞を使って文をつなげ、具体的な頻度や理由を明確に述べる練習をしてください。

例: When I was a kid, we used to have a party once a month. My parents wanted to cheer us up and create an enjoyable environment, even though they were very busy.

提案: この回答は内容が豊富ですが、文法ミスや不自然な表現が目立ちます。例えば、「I have to organize」は過去の話なので「I organized」が適切です。また、「I it was very experimental and very fun」は文法的に誤りです。接続詞を使って文をつなげ、過去形を正しく使い、具体的な経験を簡潔に述べる練習をしてください。

例: Yes, I organized a big event called the Color Festival in my final year of college. It included music, dance, water games, and lots of food. The event was very exciting and fun, and I was the coordinator of the program.

× Yes, I like to be on parties, especially when there are lots of friends which are very energetic, lovely and close to me because those party instantly pushed up my mind and.

✓ Yes, I like to be at parties, especially when there are lots of friends who are very energetic, lovely and close to me because those parties instantly lift my spirits.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to attending parties; the correct preposition is 'at'. Also, 'which' should be 'who' when referring to people. 'Party' should be plural 'parties' to match 'lots of friends'. 'Pushed up my mind' is unnatural; 'lift my spirits' is a better expression.

× Yes, I like to be on parties, especially when there are lots of friends which are very energetic, lovely and close to me because those party instantly pushed up my mind and.

✓ Yes, I like to be at parties, especially when there are lots of friends who are very energetic, lovely and close to me because those parties instantly lift my spirits.

The noun 'party' should be plural 'parties' to agree with 'those'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× Yes, I like to be on parties, especially when there are lots of friends which are very energetic, lovely and close to me because those party instantly pushed up my mind and.

✓ Yes, I like to be at parties, especially when there are lots of friends who are very energetic, lovely and close to me because those parties instantly lift my spirits.

'Which' is used for things, but when referring to people, 'who' is correct. This is an incorrect use of pronouns.

× To be precise, I believe we would have a party for a party within a month.

✓ To be precise, I believe we would have a party once a month.

'For a party within a month' is awkward and incorrect. The phrase 'once a month' correctly expresses the frequency. Also, 'would have a party for a party' is redundant.

× My parents always want to cheer up us and make enjoyable environment even they have busier schedule for a month.

✓ My parents always want to cheer us up and create an enjoyable environment even when they have a busier schedule during the month.

'Cheer up us' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'cheer us up'. Also, 'make enjoyable environment' should be 'create an enjoyable environment'. 'Even they have busier schedule' should be 'even when they have a busier schedule'. This is incorrect use of pronouns and prepositions.

× My parents always want to cheer up us and make enjoyable environment even they have busier schedule for a month.

✓ My parents always want to cheer us up and create an enjoyable environment even when they have a busier schedule during the month.

'Schedule' should be singular with 'a' or plural with 'schedules' depending on context. Here, 'a busier schedule' is correct. Also, 'environment' needs an article 'an'.

× Yes, I have organized a party in my final year of college.

✓ Yes, I organized a party in my final year of college.

'Have organized' is present perfect, but since the time is specified ('in my final year of college'), simple past 'organized' is more appropriate.

× I have to organize a big event called the Color Festival which included music, dance, water, games and lots of food.

✓ I had to organize a big event called the Color Festival, which included music, dance, water games, and lots of food.

'Have to organize' is present tense, but the event is in the past, so 'had to organize' is correct. Also, 'water' should be 'water games' for clarity. Commas are added for correct sentence structure.

× I it was very experimental and very fun.

✓ It was very experimental and very fun.

The phrase 'I it' is incorrect and redundant. The correct sentence starts with 'It was...'.

× I was the coordinator and of the that program.

✓ I was the coordinator of that program.

'And of the that program' is incorrect and redundant. The correct phrase is 'coordinator of that program'.