Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit long and has some grammatical errors. Try to keep your response concise and directly answer the question first. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear opinion, then explain why, and finish with a relevant detail.

例: I don't usually consider myself a party person. However, when I attend parties with my friends, I enjoy them because they give me a chance to reunite and create great memories.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Try to complete your sentences and provide specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid ending abruptly; finish your thoughts clearly.

例: As a child, we didn't have many parties except for birthdays in our neighborhood. I always felt excited during these celebrations because I love sweets and enjoyed the treats.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences. Try to structure your response clearly: state what you did, who was involved, and how the event went. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and complete your sentences.

例: Yes, last winter I organized a family party for my parents' wedding anniversary. I invited their close friends and special family members, and we all had a wonderful time celebrating by cutting the cake together.

× if I have to go to in parties with my friends then I love to because it gave me chance to reunion with my friends and spend some quality time and made a great memories with them

✓ if I have to go to parties with my friends then I love to because it gives me a chance to reunite with my friends and spend some quality time and make great memories with them

The phrase 'go to in parties' is incorrect; 'to' or 'in' should be used, not both together. Also, 'gave me chance to reunion' is incorrect; it should be 'gives me a chance to reunite'. 'Made a great memories' should be 'make great memories' to maintain present tense and correct plural usage.

× Parties is not about having fun

✓ Parties are not about having fun

The subject 'Parties' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× I think in childhood it's not about a party, it's having a birthday of our special ones, especially in our neighborhood

✓ I think in childhood it was not about parties, it was about having birthdays of our special ones, especially in our neighborhood

The sentence refers to past time ('childhood'), so past tense 'was' should be used instead of present tense 'is'. Also, 'a party' should be plural 'parties' to generalize, and 'birthday' should be plural 'birthdays'.

× whenever there is a birthday in my neighborhood, I felt so excited because I am a sweet tooth and

✓ whenever there was a birthday in my neighborhood, I felt so excited because I have a sweet tooth

The tense should be consistent; 'is' should be 'was' to match past tense 'felt'. Also, 'I am a sweet tooth' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I have a sweet tooth'.

× last year during winter they were marriage anniversary of my parents and and I organized a family party for them

✓ last year during winter it was the marriage anniversary of my parents and I organized a family party for them

The phrase 'they were marriage anniversary' is incorrect; it should be 'it was the marriage anniversary' to correctly refer to a singular event in past tense.

× I invited their close friend and some special family members of us and we had a great time together

✓ I invited their close friends and some special family members of ours and we had a great time together

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'some special family members'. Also, 'family members of us' is incorrect; it should be 'family members of ours'.