Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多いです。特に「I like Bali」や「pleasant which which is selected by」の部分は意味が不明瞭です。より自然で明確な表現を心がけ、文を簡潔にまとめることが重要です。

例: Yes, I like parties, especially birthday parties for my friends because they are full of happiness. I enjoy celebrating with them and giving thoughtful presents.

提案: 回答は質問に対して直接的ですが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、「It's not usually for me」は不自然で、「Parties were not frequent for me」などが適切です。より具体的な頻度や感情を加えると良いでしょう。

例: I didn't have parties very often as a kid because they were usually reserved for special occasions like birthdays, Christmas, and Halloween. I especially enjoyed celebrating Christmas with my family, eating turkey and pudding.

提案: 文法的に不正確で意味が伝わりにくいです。「when I heard party with my friend」は不自然で、「When I organize a party with my friends」が適切です。文を整理し、具体的な内容を明確に述べることが必要です。

例: Yes, I have organized parties with my friends. We usually plan the program carefully and decide on food and activities, such as playing bingo.

× Yes, I like Bali especially I prefer birthday party for my friends because it is full of happiness and I like to celebrate someone with pleasant which which is selected by.

✓ Yes, I like Bali. Especially, I prefer birthday parties for my friends because they are full of happiness and I like to celebrate someone with a pleasant atmosphere which is carefully selected.

The original sentence has incorrect preposition usage such as 'birthday party for my friends' which should be 'birthday parties for my friends' to indicate plural and correct preposition. Also, 'celebrate someone with pleasant which which is selected by' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'celebrate someone with a pleasant atmosphere which is carefully selected.' Improving preposition use and article usage clarifies the meaning.

× It's not usually for me because party is special day for birthday, Christmas and Halloween especially.

✓ It's not usual for me because parties are special days for birthdays, Christmas, and especially Halloween.

The sentence incorrectly uses singular forms 'party' and 'special day' when referring to multiple occasions. The plural forms 'parties' and 'special days' are appropriate here to match the plural events mentioned.

× I like to celebrate Christmas with my family with Turkey and pudding.

✓ I like to celebrate Christmas with my family, having turkey and pudding.

The preposition 'with' is used twice awkwardly. The second 'with' should be replaced with a phrase like 'having' to indicate the food served during the celebration.

× Yes, when I heard party with my friend I always think consider about the program and we think about food and activities like bingo.

✓ Yes, when I have a party with my friends, I always think about the program and we think about food and activities like bingo.

The phrase 'heard party with my friend' is incorrect; it should be 'have a party with my friends.' Also, 'think consider about' is redundant; 'think about' suffices. Preposition 'about' is correctly used with 'think'.