Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời trở nên mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các từ nối để liên kết các ý và tránh lặp từ.

例: Yes, I really enjoy parties because they help me relax after a long day at work. Moreover, I get the chance to meet new people and catch up with my friends, which makes me very happy.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu chưa chính xác, làm cho ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề, sau đó bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: When I was a kid, I usually had one party every year, which was my birthday party. My family and friends would all come together to celebrate and have fun.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể hơn. Đồng thời, hãy sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, sometimes I organize parties with my partner and friends. We use these occasions to celebrate new achievements, catch up, and reminisce about our childhood memories.

× Actually, I am a person who into parties.

✓ Actually, I am a person who is into parties.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'who' to correctly link the subject and the prepositional phrase. The correct structure is 'a person who is into parties.'

× How to reduce my chest after boring work and I can meet friends and meet new people when I am joining the parties.

✓ It helps me reduce stress after boring work, and I can meet friends and new people when I join parties.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a clear subject and verb. 'How to reduce my chest' is unclear and incorrect; it should express the purpose or effect of parties. Also, 'when I am joining the parties' is awkward; 'when I join parties' is more natural.

× When I work it I often have party one times in a year it's it's my birthday party.

✓ When I was a kid, I often had one party a year; it was my birthday party.

The sentence mixes tenses and has incorrect word order. 'When I work it' is incorrect; it should be 'When I was a kid' to match the question. 'Have party one times' is incorrect; it should be 'had one party.' Also, 'it's it's' is redundant and should be 'it was.'

× Everyone, my friends, my family join in the party to happy enjoy my birthday.

✓ Everyone, my friends and my family, join the party to happily enjoy my birthday.

The phrase 'join in the party' should be 'join the party.' Also, 'to happy enjoy' is incorrect; the adverb 'happily' should be used to modify the verb 'enjoy.'

× Sometimes I organize a party with my partner, with my friend to sign new contact, to talk, to memorize about our childhood.

✓ Sometimes I organize a party with my partner or my friends to make new contacts, to talk, and to reminisce about our childhood.

'With my friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context. 'To sign new contact' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'to make new contacts.' 'To memorize about our childhood' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'to reminisce about our childhood.'