Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct grammar and more natural expressions. For example, say 'I don't like parties' instead of 'I don't like party'. Also, avoid redundancy and clarify your ideas with linking words. For instance, you can say, 'I don't like parties because I have to talk to strangers, and the loud music makes it difficult to communicate.'

例: I don't like parties because I have to talk to people I don't know, and the loud music makes it hard to have a conversation.

提案: Use plural forms correctly and improve sentence structure. For example, say 'We didn't have many parties' instead of 'much party'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, like 'because' and 'so'.

例: We didn't have many parties when I was a kid because my parents were busy and we didn't have enough money, so we usually just hung out and had dinner together.

提案: Focus on correct verb tenses and sentence structure. For example, say 'I haven't organized a party, but I have helped my friends organise one.' Also, use linking words like 'because' to explain reasons clearly.

例: No, I haven't organized a party, but I have helped my friends organise one because I find organising a party stressful since there are so many things to do.

× No, I don't like party.

✓ No, I don't like parties.

The noun 'party' should be plural 'parties' because the sentence refers to parties in general, not a single party.

× In the party I have to talk to someone who don't know and in the party I had to talk to them because the louder music.

✓ At parties, I have to talk to people I don't know and I had to talk to them because of the loud music.

The pronoun 'someone who don't know' is incorrect; it should be 'people I don't know'. Also, 'because the louder music' is incorrect; it should be 'because of the loud music'. Additionally, 'in the party' is better expressed as 'at parties'.

× So I don't like the party.

✓ So I don't like parties.

Again, 'party' should be plural 'parties' to refer generally to such events.

× We didn't have much party when I was a kid.

✓ We didn't have many parties when I was a kid.

'Party' is countable, so 'much' is incorrect; 'many' should be used with plural 'parties'.

× My parents were busy and we don't have enough money to hold the party.

✓ My parents were busy and we didn't have enough money to hold parties.

The sentence refers to the past, so 'don't have' should be 'didn't have'. Also, 'the party' should be plural 'parties' to match context.

× However, we would just hang out with dinner instead.

✓ However, we would just hang out for dinner instead.

'Hang out with dinner' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'for' when referring to an activity involving dinner.

× No, I haven't organized a party but I have I had experience to help my friends organise a party.

✓ No, I haven't organized a party but I have had experience helping my friends organise a party.

The phrase 'I have I had experience' is incorrect; it should be 'I have had experience'. Also, 'to help' should be 'helping' to correctly follow 'experience'.

× I feel organise a party is stressful for me because so much thing to do.

✓ I feel organising a party is stressful for me because there are so many things to do.

'Organise' should be in the -ing form 'organising' after 'feel'. 'So much thing' is incorrect; it should be 'so many things' because 'things' is countable. Also, 'there are' is needed for grammatical correctness.