Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cavabınızda qrammatik səhvlər və təbii olmayan ifadələr var. Daha aydın və qısa cümlələr qurmağa çalışın, məsələn, 'I like parties because they are enjoyable and a great way to spend time with friends.' kimi. Həmçinin, əlaqələndirici sözlərdən istifadə edərək fikirlərinizi daha məntiqli edin.

例: I like parties because they are enjoyable and a great way to spend time with friends. When I attend parties, I feel happy and energetic. Moreover, we often take pictures to remember these moments.

提案: Cümlələrinizdə qrammatik səhvlər və təkrarlar var. Cavabınızı daha sadə və aydın ifadə edin. Məsələn, 'I usually had a party on my birthday, which my family organized for me. They always tried to include things I liked.' kimi ifadələr istifadə edin.

例: I usually had a party on my birthday, which my family organized for me. They always tried to include things I liked, such as my favorite games and decorations.

提案: Cümlələrinizdə qrammatik səhvlər və qarışıqlıq var. Cavabınızı daha aydın və təbii etmək üçün, məsələn, 'Yes, after I turned 16, I started organizing my own parties. I enjoy planning fun activities and games for my friends.' kimi ifadələrdən istifadə edin.

例: Yes, after I turned 16, I started organizing my own parties. I enjoy planning fun activities and games for my friends, which makes the parties more enjoyable.

× Yeah, I do liking parties very much because I found them enjoyable and interesting.

✓ Yeah, I like parties very much because I find them enjoyable and interesting.

The verb 'do' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. 'Do liking' is incorrect; it should be 'like'. Also, 'found' should be 'find' to match the present tense context.

× When I go there, I feel happy and energetic because when we dare, we can have fun with my friends or young people and we do take care of pictures.

✓ When I go there, I feel happy and energetic because we can have fun with my friends or other young people and we take pictures.

The phrase 'when we dare' is incorrect and unclear; it should be removed or replaced. 'We do take care of pictures' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'we take pictures'. The sentence structure is confusing and needs simplification.

× I usually had a party on my birthday when I was a kid and of course my family organized these parties.

✓ I usually had a party on my birthday when I was a kid, and of course, my family organized these parties.

The sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma before 'and' for clarity. 'Usually had' is acceptable in past tense context.

× They also considered my own things and when I wanted, they organized for my. Own things for my interest.

✓ They also considered my own things, and when I wanted, they organized my own things according to my interests.

The phrase 'organized for my. Own things' is incorrect. The preposition 'for' is unnecessary, and the sentence is fragmented. It should be rephrased for clarity and correct preposition use.

× Yeah, when I was a child, my family organized the party, but after 16 years old, I tried to organize my parties for my interest and with my hands.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, my family organized the party, but after I turned 16 years old, I tried to organize my parties according to my interests and by myself.

The phrase 'after 16 years old' is incorrect; it should be 'after I turned 16 years old'. 'With my hands' is a literal translation and should be replaced with 'by myself' to express doing something independently.

× And that's why I really like organized parties with enjoyable like such as games or activities.

✓ And that's why I really like organizing enjoyable parties with games or activities.

'Like organized parties with enjoyable' is incorrect. The verb form should be 'organizing', and 'enjoyable' should describe 'parties'. The phrase 'like such as' is redundant; 'with games or activities' suffices.