Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a reason using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, say "No, I don't like parties because I'm an introvert and find socializing challenging."

例: No, I don't like parties because I'm an introverted person and find socializing quite difficult.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to give a direct response with specific details and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, correct grammar and pronunciation are important. For example, "I rarely had parties as a child, but I remember attending a Christmas party at my English school every year."

例: I rarely had parties as a child, but I remember attending a Christmas party at my English school every year.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more structured. Start with a direct answer, then explain with specific details using linking words. Also, use correct tense and grammar. For example, "Yes, I have organised a few parties. For instance, during my working holiday, I organised a farewell party for a roommate and introduced Japanese food."

例: Yes, I have organised a few parties. For example, during my working holiday, I organised a farewell party for one of my roommates and introduced Japanese food.

× My characteristic is introvert person, so I am not good at joining party and neither I'm not good at socializing.

✓ My characteristic is that I am an introverted person, so I am not good at joining parties and neither am I good at socializing.

The adjective 'introvert' should be 'introverted' to correctly describe a person. Also, 'joining party' should be plural 'joining parties' to match the context. The phrase 'neither I'm not good' is incorrect; it should be 'neither am I good' to maintain proper negative agreement and word order.

× I barely had a parties when I was a kid, but I remember when I was AII was I was when I went to the English school every Christmas they had a.

✓ I barely had parties when I was a kid, but I remember when I went to the English school every Christmas they had a party.

The phrase 'a parties' is incorrect because 'a' is used with singular nouns; 'parties' is plural. It should be 'parties' without 'a' or 'a party' if singular. The sentence was also incomplete and unclear; it has been corrected for clarity and grammar.

× What I remember is when I am doing a working holiday and one of my roommates is leaving, I try to organize a party, for example introducing Japanese food.

✓ What I remember is when I was doing a working holiday and one of my roommates was leaving, I tried to organize a party, for example introducing Japanese food.

The sentence refers to a past event, so the present tense 'am doing', 'is leaving', and 'try' should be changed to past tense 'was doing', 'was leaving', and 'tried' to maintain tense consistency.