Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言不够自然流畅，有重复和语法错误，表达不够简洁。建议避免重复表达，使用更准确的词汇，并注意语法和句子结构，使回答更自然有效。

例: Yes, I enjoy parties, especially those with lively music and delicious food. Attending parties with my friends is always fun because we can play various games and enjoy some drinks and snacks, which really lifts my mood.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但句子结构稍显简单，连接词使用不足。建议使用更多连接词使表达更连贯，同时丰富细节描述。

例: To be honest, I rarely attended parties as a child because my parents focused heavily on my studies. However, after I turned 14, parties became more popular, and I started going to them with my friends almost twice a week.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议注意时态和句子结构，使用更准确的词汇，并且使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I have. I organized my senior year graduation party because I was the class representative. I managed the class members and planned some fun games, which made the event very exciting.

× Yes I do, especially the one with loud music and delicious foods because going to the party can make me feel energy, especially going with my friends.

✓ Yes I do, especially the ones with loud music and delicious food because going to the party can make me feel energetic, especially going with my friends.

“the one”应改为复数形式“the ones”，因为指的是多种派对；“foods”应为不可数名词“food”；“feel energy”应改为“feel energetic”，因为“energy”是名词，需用形容词“energetic”来表达感受。

× Yes I do, especially the one with loud music and delicious foods because going to the party can make me feel energy, especially going with my friends.

✓ Yes I do, especially the ones with loud music and delicious food because going to the party can make me feel energetic, especially going with my friends.

“feel energy”错误，应该用形容词“energetic”来描述感受，而不是名词“energy”。

× We can play tons of games there and enjoy the beers, even the snack and that will keep you in the very high mood and help you to umm, alter your alter your exciting.

✓ We can play tons of games there and enjoy the beer, even the snacks and that will keep you in a very good mood and help you to, umm, alter your excitement.

“the beers”应为不可数名词“beer”；“the snack”应为复数“snacks”；“in the very high mood”应改为“in a very good mood”；“alter your alter your exciting”表达不清，应改为“alter your excitement”。

× To be honest, when I was a kid, I didn't go. I didn't go to any parties at all because at that time parents paid a lot of attention on study, so they pushed their children to learn more in school.

✓ To be honest, when I was a kid, I didn't go to any parties at all because at that time parents paid a lot of attention to study, so they pushed their children to learn more in school.

“paid a lot of attention on study”中的介词应为“to”，正确表达为“paid a lot of attention to study”。

× However, when I turned 14, the party was more popular than it used to be, so I went to the party with my friends almost twice a week.

✓ However, when I turned 14, parties were more popular than they used to be, so I went to parties with my friends almost twice a week.

“the party was more popular”应改为复数“parties were more popular”，因为指的是多次派对；“I went to the party”应改为复数“went to parties”。

× Yes, I did. I remembered that was my graduation parties in the senior year and at that time I was the minister in the class.

✓ Yes, I did. I remember that was my graduation party in senior year and at that time I was the minister in the class.

“I remembered”应为一般现在时“I remember”，因为是在叙述记忆；“graduation parties”应为单数“graduation party”；“in the senior year”应改为“in senior year”。

× Yes, I did. I remembered that was my graduation parties in the senior year and at that time I was the minister in the class.

✓ Yes, I did. I remember that was my graduation party in senior year and at that time I was the minister in the class.

“graduation parties”应为单数“graduation party”，因为通常指一次毕业派对。

× So I I had advantage to manage all the members in our classroom and besides, I could figure it out some very fun games to play with and that was really exciting.

✓ So I had the advantage of managing all the members in our classroom and besides, I could figure out some very fun games to play, and that was really exciting.

“had advantage to manage”应为“had the advantage of managing”；“figure it out some”应为“figure out some”；“play with”后面缺少宾语，改为“play”即可。