Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and natural, but there are some grammatical errors and slight redundancy. For example, "If I on a good mood" should be "If I'm in a good mood." Also, avoid repeating "I love that" twice. Try to use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly, such as "however" or "otherwise."

例: I like parties depending on my mood. If I'm in a good mood and want to socialize, I enjoy loud music, dancing, and drinking. However, if I'm feeling a bit down, I prefer to be alone and relax quietly.

提案: Your answer provides relevant details but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. For example, "gather a party" should be "organize a party," and "on my parties" should be "at my parties." Also, try to use linking words like "so" or "because" to make your answer more coherent.

例: I didn't have many parties myself as a kid, but my parents organized a birthday party every year and invited my friends. I would open presents and dance with them. There was always a clown at the parties, which I really enjoyed because it made the celebrations fun.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to enhance coherence. For example, use "because" to explain why you haven't organized a party and "therefore" or "so" to connect your ideas.

例: I have never organized a party myself because it requires a lot of effort and planning. However, if I get the opportunity in the future, I would love to host a party and invite all my friends to celebrate together.

× If I on a good mood and I want to socialize with people, then I love parties and loud music, dancing, drinking.

✓ If I am in a good mood and I want to socialize with people, then I love parties and loud music, dancing, drinking.

The phrase 'If I on a good mood' is missing the verb 'am' and the preposition 'in' to correctly express the state of being in a mood. The correct phrase is 'If I am in a good mood.' This fixes the singular and plural issue by properly using the verb 'am' with the singular subject 'I' and the correct preposition 'in'.

× If I on a good mood and I want to socialize with people, then I love parties and loud music, dancing, drinking.

✓ If I am in a good mood and I want to socialize with people, then I love parties and loud music, dancing, drinking.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'mood.' The correct preposition is 'in' when referring to being in a particular mood. Therefore, 'on a good mood' should be corrected to 'in a good mood.'

× How often did you have a party when you were a kid? Student: When I was a kid, I wouldn't really have parties, but my parents would gather a party and invite my friends on my birthday every year and I would open presents.

✓ When I was a kid, I wouldn't really have parties, but my parents would organize a party and invite my friends on my birthday every year and I would open presents.

The verb 'gather' is incorrectly used here. The correct verb to describe arranging a party is 'organize.' Also, 'gather a party' is not idiomatic English. Using 'organize a party' correctly conveys the intended meaning in past tense.

× there would always be a clown on my parties and I love that as a child.

✓ there would always be a clown at my parties and I loved that as a child.

The phrase 'on my parties' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at' when referring to events. Also, 'parties' is plural, which is correct here. Additionally, 'I love that as a child' should be in past tense 'I loved that as a child' to match the time frame.

× there would always be a clown on my parties and I love that as a child.

✓ there would always be a clown at my parties and I loved that as a child.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'parties.' The correct preposition to indicate presence at an event is 'at.' Therefore, 'on my parties' should be corrected to 'at my parties.'

× there would always be a clown on my parties and I love that as a child.

✓ there would always be a clown at my parties and I loved that as a child.

The phrase 'I love that as a child' mixes present tense 'love' with past time 'as a child.' To maintain tense consistency, it should be 'I loved that as a child.'

× I never really had the chance to throw a party by myself because it takes a lot of work and I think it is kind of hard.

✓ I never really had the chance to throw a party by myself because it takes a lot of work and I think it would be kind of hard.

The phrase 'I think it is kind of hard' refers to a hypothetical situation. Using 'would be' instead of 'is' correctly expresses the conditional mood, indicating that throwing a party would be hard if attempted.