Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and lacks natural phrasing. Try to give a direct response first, then explain your reason clearly using simple and natural English. Avoid vague expressions like "spend my time around."

例: No, I don't like parties because I prefer to spend my time focusing on my personal goals and self-improvement.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and avoid repeating the same phrase. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific details.

例: When I was a child, it was popular to have birthday parties. So, my family organized a birthday party for me every year.

提案: Your answer is unclear and does not directly answer the question about organizing a party. Try to clearly state if you have organized a party and provide specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I organized a party last week for my friend's birthday. We invited several friends and enjoyed drinking and chatting until the next morning.

× I don't, I usually spend my time around because I just want to focus on something or improve my life.

✓ I don't. I usually spend my time at home because I just want to focus on something or improve my life.

The original sentence lacks clarity and proper preposition use. 'Spend my time around' is vague; 'spend my time at home' is more appropriate. Also, the sentence should be split into two for clarity. This improves sentence structure and meaning.

× When I was young, it's very trend kind of birthday party.

✓ When I was young, trendy birthday parties were very popular.

The original sentence mixes present tense 'it's' with past context 'When I was young'. Also, 'trend kind of birthday party' is incorrect; 'trendy birthday parties' is the correct adjective and plural form. The verb should be past tense 'were' to match the time frame.

× When I was young, we just made a birthday party every year.

✓ When I was young, we just had a birthday party every year.

'Made a birthday party' is incorrect collocation; 'had a birthday party' is the correct expression. The sentence is otherwise correct in singular/plural usage.

× Yes, one week ago my friend was inviting me, that's why I visited there.

✓ Yes, one week ago my friend invited me, that's why I visited there.

'Was inviting' is past continuous, which is not appropriate here; simple past 'invited' is correct for a completed action in the past. This matches the time expression 'one week ago'.

× Then we were drinking a lot until next morning.

✓ Then we drank a lot until the next morning.

'Were drinking' is past continuous, but the action is completed and specific in time, so simple past 'drank' is more appropriate. Also, 'next morning' should be 'the next morning' to specify the time.