Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use a clear topic sentence and support it with concise reasons. For example, avoid repeating words like 'go' and ensure verb forms are correct. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy parties, especially birthday celebrations, because they allow me to spend quality time with my friends. Moreover, as an extroverted person, I love being around others and socializing.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and completeness. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific supporting details. Avoid incomplete sentences and irrelevant phrases. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

例: As a child, I attended only a few parties, mostly birthday celebrations. I enjoyed going to my friends' birthdays because it was a special time to have fun together.

提案: Improve your answer by using correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structures. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words to make your answer more coherent and engaging.

例: Yes, I recently organized a birthday party for a close childhood friend. It was very special to me, and we had a great time celebrating together with various fun activities.

× I love to being around.

✓ I love being around.

The verb 'love' is followed by the gerund form without 'to'. The phrase 'love to being' is incorrect; it should be 'love being'. This is a common error when mixing infinitive and gerund forms.

× When I was a kid there was only a few parties.

✓ When I was a kid there were only a few parties.

The subject 'a few parties' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to singular and plural forms.

× we only have parties of a birthday celebration

✓ we only had parties for birthday celebrations

The verb tense should match the past context ('had' instead of 'have'). Also, 'parties of a birthday celebration' is awkward; 'parties for birthday celebrations' is more natural and plural to match 'parties'.

× I love to go to there for for my friends.

✓ I love to go there for my friends.

The preposition 'to' is redundant before 'there'. The correct phrase is 'go there', not 'go to there'. Also, the repeated 'for' is a typographical error.

× I don't think so. I don't even remember that time. I have a.

✓ I don't think so. I don't even remember that time.

The sentence 'I have a.' is incomplete and does not convey a clear meaning. It should be removed to maintain sentence clarity and correctness.

× I organise a party recently which is a birthday party of one of my friend, which is very near to my heart actually.

✓ I organised a party recently which was a birthday party of one of my friends, which is very near to my heart actually.

The verb 'organise' should be in the past tense 'organised' to match 'recently'. Also, 'one of my friend' should be plural 'friends' to be grammatically correct.

× which is very near to my heart actually.

✓ which is very near my heart actually.

The phrase 'near to' is less common and often 'near' without 'to' is preferred in this context.