Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "how thief schedules" which seems incorrect. Try to use simpler, clearer expressions and correct grammar. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: No, I don't like parties because I prefer to keep a regular schedule and avoid staying up late. Also, parties often involve drinking alcohol, and I don't like feeling drunk or losing control of what I say or do.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical mistakes and incomplete phrases, such as "from 'cause" which is unclear. Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, be more specific about the frequency if possible.

例: I only remember having one party when I was a kid, which was my 11th birthday. I invited my best friends, and my mom prepared a cake for us to share. That was the only birthday party I can recall from my childhood.

提案: Your answer has good content but is fragmented and contains grammatical errors. Try to combine your sentences into a clear, coherent response. Use correct verb forms and linking words to improve flow. Also, clarify the last part about "seeds" which seems incorrect.

例: When I was in elementary school, I was part of a small group responsible for organizing the New Year's Eve party for our class. We cleaned the classroom, decorated it, and rearranged the desks to create space in the center for the event.

× No, I am not a party person because I don't like staying up to late.

✓ No, I am not a party person because I don't like staying up too late.

The phrase 'up to late' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'up too late' where 'too' means 'excessively'. This is a common error involving adverb usage, but since 'too' is not in the list, the closest relevant problem type is 'Verb + -ing form' as it relates to the verb phrase 'staying up too late'. The correction improves clarity and correctness.

× I prefer how thief schedules.

✓ I prefer their schedules.

The word 'thief' is a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'their', which is a possessive pronoun. Using 'their' correctly shows possession of the schedules. This is an incorrect use of pronouns error.

× Also party usually means drinking alcohol to me and I don't like the feeling of being drunk and saying something that I don't have control off.

✓ Also, parties usually mean drinking alcohol to me and I don't like the feeling of being drunk and saying something that I don't have control over.

The word 'party' should be plural 'parties' to match the general statement. Also, 'control off' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'control over'. The pluralization is a singular and plural issue, and the preposition error is an incorrect use of prepositions, but only the plural issue is corrected here as per instructions.

× I don't like the feeling of being drunk and saying something that I don't have control off.

✓ I don't like the feeling of being drunk and saying something that I don't have control over.

The preposition 'off' is incorrect in this context; the correct preposition is 'over' when referring to control. This is an incorrect use of prepositions error.

× I don't like myself saying or doing anything unconsciously.

✓ I don't like myself saying or doing anything unconsciously.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'unconsciously' might be better replaced with 'unintentionally' or 'without control' for clarity. However, since it does not violate the listed grammar problem types, no correction is made.

× I only remember I had a one party when I was a kid.

✓ I only remember I had one party when I was a kid.

The phrase 'a one party' is incorrect; 'one' is a determiner and does not need 'a' before it. This is a sentence structure error, but since it relates to article usage, it is closest to article errors. However, as per instructions, only grammar problem types listed are corrected, so this is a minor correction related to article usage.

× That was my 11th birthday party.

✓ That was my 11th birthday party.

This sentence is correct and requires no correction.

× I invited my best friends from 'cause my mom prepared a cake for us to share.

✓ I invited my best friends because my mom prepared a cake for us to share.

The phrase 'from 'cause' is incorrect and incomplete. It should be 'because' to connect the clauses properly. This is a sentence structure error involving conjunction usage.

× That was almost the only birthday party I've ever remembered in my whole life.

✓ That was almost the only birthday party I have ever remembered in my whole life.

The contraction 'I've' stands for 'I have', which is correct for present perfect tense. The sentence is acceptable, but 'remembered' is better as 'remembered' in present perfect. Since 'remembered' is past participle, this is correct usage. No correction needed.

× I remember when I was in elementary school was a member of the small group who were responsible for organizing the New Year's Eve party.

✓ I remember when I was in elementary school I was a member of a small group who were responsible for organizing the New Year's Eve party.

The original sentence is missing the subject 'I' in the second clause, causing a sentence structure error. Adding 'I was' corrects the sentence.

× I remember when I was in elementary school was a member of the small group who were responsible for organizing the New Year's Eve party.

✓ I remember when I was in elementary school I was a member of a small group who were responsible for organizing the New Year's Eve party.

The phrase 'the small group' implies a specific group known to the listener, but 'a small group' is more appropriate here as it introduces the group for the first time. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers.

× For the whole class.

✓ It was for the whole class.

'For the whole class.' is a sentence fragment without a verb. Adding 'It was' completes the sentence structure.

× We were responsible for cleaning the classroom, do some decoration and rearrange the desks and seeds to make sure that there is a room in the Center for our.

✓ We were responsible for cleaning the classroom, doing some decoration, and rearranging the desks and seats to make sure that there was room in the center for us.

After 'responsible for', verbs should be in the '-ing' form. Also, 'seeds' is a mispronunciation of 'seats'. 'There is' should be 'there was' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Center' and 'us' are corrected for capitalization and pronoun use. This correction addresses verb + -ing form, singular/plural, and tense issues.