Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors that affect naturalness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy parties very much. For example, I often attend birthday parties, weddings, and anniversary celebrations. I like these events because they allow me to spend time with my family and friends.

提案: Your answer is unclear and difficult to understand. Focus on giving a direct response with specific details and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Keep your sentences complete and relevant to the question.

例: When I was a kid, I attended parties quite often, especially birthday parties during the summer. These events were very enjoyable and created lasting memories for me.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and lacks coherence. Provide a clear topic sentence, then add specific details with linking words to improve flow. Avoid fragmented sentences and be precise about your experience.

例: Yes, I have organized several parties, mainly birthday celebrations. For instance, two years ago, after I received a promotion at work, my friends asked me to host a party. I organized a big event, although not everyone could attend.

× Yes, I like party actually every, every people, many people say I like your parties.

✓ Yes, I like parties actually, many people say I like your parties.

The word 'party' should be plural 'parties' to match the context of multiple events. Also, 'every people' is incorrect; 'many people' is appropriate here.

× So I'm enjoying the parties when my organizes up like a birthday party, marriage, anniversary party.

✓ So I enjoy the parties when my family organizes events like birthday parties, marriages, and anniversary parties.

The sentence structure is unclear and incomplete. 'My organizes up' is incorrect; it should specify who organizes. Also, 'marriage' should be pluralized to 'marriages' to match the list.

× I'm. Attending every party and enjoying our meters, our relative and.

✓ I attend every party and enjoy meeting our relatives.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Our meters' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'our relatives'. The sentence needs to be complete and coherent.

× No, I like uh was July of 100 join the parties like birthday parties and any was departing.

✓ No, I liked joining parties like birthday parties and other events when I was a kid.

The sentence uses incorrect tense and unclear phrases. 'I like uh was July of 100 join' is incorrect. The past tense 'liked' fits the question about childhood.

× I am going in the join the party invite for party.

✓ I used to go to parties when I was invited.

The original sentence is grammatically incorrect and unclear. The correction clarifies the intended meaning in proper past tense.

× So we are very. That is the enjoyment of over and keep in mind to memory.

✓ So we had a lot of fun, and I keep those memories in mind.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction provides a coherent and grammatically correct sentence.

× Yes, so far I am organized a lot of parties, like birthday parties.

✓ Yes, so far I have organized a lot of parties, like birthday parties.

The present perfect tense 'have organized' is appropriate to indicate experience up to now, rather than 'am organized' which is incorrect.

× Sometime before two years ago I was. Companies given me a promotion, then my friends.

✓ About two years ago, my company gave me a promotion, and then my friends

The sentence uses incorrect tense and structure. 'I was. Companies given me' is incorrect; it should be 'my company gave me' in past tense.

× Ask for me a party and then I organized a big parties.

✓ asked me for a party, and then I organized a big party.

'Ask for me a party' is incorrect; it should be 'asked me for a party'. Also, 'a big parties' is incorrect; 'a big party' is singular.

× Not every people join and join.

✓ Not everyone joined.

'Every people' is incorrect; 'everyone' is the correct singular pronoun. Also, 'join and join' is repetitive and incorrect past tense 'joined' is needed.