Party— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Améliorez la clarté et la grammaire de votre réponse. Évitez les erreurs comme "his way too noisy" et utilisez des phrases plus courtes et précises. Par exemple, commencez par une phrase claire exprimant votre opinion, puis expliquez avec des détails spécifiques en utilisant des mots de liaison.

例: I don't enjoy large parties because they are often noisy and crowded. However, I like small, intimate gatherings such as my family's birthday parties because they feel cozy and allow us to celebrate special occasions comfortably.

提案: Travaillez sur la fluidité et la structure de vos phrases. Évitez les répétitions comme "usually" et les phrases incomplètes. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus cohérente et donnez des détails spécifiques sur la fréquence et les types de fêtes.

例: I don't remember many parties from my childhood, but my family usually organized birthday parties for each member. These celebrations were cozy and featured delicious dishes, which made them very enjoyable.

提案: Améliorez la cohérence et la précision de votre réponse. Utilisez des phrases complètes et des mots de liaison pour connecter vos idées. Soyez plus spécifique sur ce que vous avez fait pour organiser la fête et comment vous avez surpris les invités.

例: Yes, I have organized several birthday parties for my family members because I enjoy making them happy. I usually plan surprise parties with birthday cakes, gifts, and decorations to create a joyful atmosphere.

× Actually I don't enjoy much parties because his way too noisy and crowded for me, but in the intimate parties like birthday party of my family members I enjoy it because it's more cozy an it's a way to celebrate the special occasion of each member is really comfy.

✓ Actually I don't enjoy many parties because they are way too noisy and crowded for me, but in intimate parties like the birthday party of my family members, I enjoy it because it's cozier and it's a way to celebrate the special occasion of each member which is really comfy.

The phrase 'much parties' is incorrect because 'much' is used with uncountable nouns, while 'parties' is countable. The correct quantifier is 'many'. Also, 'his' should be 'they' to refer to 'parties'. 'An' should be 'and'. 'More cozy' should be 'cozier' as the comparative form of 'cozy'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Actually I don't enjoy much parties because his way too noisy and crowded for me, but in the intimate parties like birthday party of my family members I enjoy it because it's more cozy an it's a way to celebrate the special occasion of each member is really comfy.

✓ Actually I don't enjoy many parties because they are way too noisy and crowded for me, but in intimate parties like the birthday party of my family members, I enjoy it because it's cozier and it's a way to celebrate the special occasion of each member which is really comfy.

The pronoun 'his' is incorrectly used to refer to 'parties', which is plural and non-human. The correct pronoun is 'they'. Also, 'it' is used ambiguously; clarifying the subject improves understanding.

× Actually I don't enjoy much parties because his way too noisy and crowded for me, but in the intimate parties like birthday party of my family members I enjoy it because it's more cozy an it's a way to celebrate the special occasion of each member is really comfy.

✓ Actually I don't enjoy many parties because they are way too noisy and crowded for me, but in intimate parties like the birthday party of my family members, I enjoy it because it's cozier and it's a way to celebrate the special occasion of each member which is really comfy.

The phrase 'in the intimate parties like birthday party' is awkward. The preposition 'in' is acceptable but the article 'the' before 'intimate parties' is unnecessary. Also, 'birthday party of my family members' should be 'the birthday party of my family members' for specificity.

× We usually in my family, we usually. Organize some parties for the birthday of each members. There are always delicious dishes an. Cozy celebrations.

✓ In my family, we usually organize some parties for the birthdays of each member. There are always delicious dishes and cozy celebrations.

The phrase 'each members' is incorrect because 'each' is singular and should be followed by a singular noun 'member'. Also, 'birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' to match 'each member'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I don't have many memories about parties when I was a kid but. We usually in my family, we usually. Organize some parties for the birthday of each members. There are always delicious dishes an. Cozy celebrations.

✓ I don't have many memories about parties when I was a kid, but in my family, we usually organize some parties for the birthdays of each member. There are always delicious dishes and cozy celebrations.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper structure. Combining them into coherent sentences improves readability and grammatical correctness.

× I don't have many memories about parties when I was a kid but. We usually in my family, we usually. Organize some parties for the birthday of each members. There are always delicious dishes an. Cozy celebrations.

✓ I didn't have many memories about parties when I was a kid, but in my family, we usually organized some parties for the birthdays of each member. There were always delicious dishes and cozy celebrations.

The question asks about past events, so the verbs should be in the past tense: 'didn't have', 'organized', and 'were' instead of present tense forms.

× Yes, I have organized some birthday parties from my family members because I always want to make them laugh. So I tried to make the birthday parties to be a surprise with the birthday cakes the gift. And others.

✓ Yes, I have organized some birthday parties for my family members because I always want to make them laugh. So I tried to make the birthday parties a surprise with birthday cakes, gifts, and other things.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect; it should be 'for' to indicate the parties are for family members. Also, 'to be a surprise' is better as 'a surprise'. The list 'the birthday cakes the gift. And others.' is corrected to 'birthday cakes, gifts, and other things' for clarity and grammatical correctness.