App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words and correct article/verb forms (e.g., 'I have recently used Instagram because...'). Avoid filler words and repetition.

例: I have recently used Instagram. I like it because it offers a wide range of short entertaining videos, especially comedy reels. For example, I often watch funny clips during my breaks, which helps me relax.

提案: Clarify which apps you mean and avoid hesitations. Give a direct topic sentence naming the app or type (e.g., search engines or streaming apps), then add specific examples and reasons. Use correct nouns and avoid incorrect plurals (e.g., 'Google' not 'the googles').

例: I usually use search engines and streaming apps to find TV shows. For instance, I use Google to search for K-dramas and then watch episodes on streaming sites like Dailymotion. This helps me quickly find new series I enjoy.

提案: Structure the answer: state the main source first, then give a specific example. Reduce repetition and improve grammar (e.g., 'A close friend recommended an app called...'). Use linking words like 'for example' and 'so' to connect ideas.

例: I usually discover new apps through my friends. For example, a close friend recently recommended an app called HITB, so I downloaded it to watch comedy clips and K-drama highlights.

提案: Give a clear future preference and reason. Avoid negative phrasing like 'not leave on Instagram' and excessive repetition. Use one topic sentence then one specific supporting detail about content you enjoy and why you'll continue using it.

例: In the future, I would like to keep using Instagram because it provides daily short videos that make me laugh. For example, I follow Indian creators who post funny reels, and watching them helps me relax after work.

× I used, uh, Instagram because I can see like different kinds of content in the daily basis and the content are very full of entertaining and comedy.

✓ I used Instagram because I can see different kinds of content on a daily basis, and the content is full of entertainment and comedy.

Use 'on a daily basis' not 'in the daily basis' (preposition and article). Also 'content' is an uncountable noun so use singular verb 'is' and 'full of entertainment' is more natural than 'full of entertaining.' Suggestion: say 'on a daily basis' and treat 'content' as singular/uncountable.

× I love to watch in my free times and I just recently used on the Instagram.

✓ I love to watch in my free time and I just recently used Instagram.

Use the singular phrase 'free time' not 'free times.' Also do not use the preposition 'on' before a platform name in this context; say 'used Instagram.' Keep verbs consistent: 'I love to watch in my free time'.

× So I'm usually, uh, I love to do with Google, umm, because I can find like different kinds of uh, dramas in there and I love to umm, watch the K dramas, Uh, so I love to go in the googles and find dramas I love from the daily motions.

✓ I'm usually using Google because I can find different kinds of dramas there, and I love to watch K-dramas. I like to go on Google and find dramas I enjoy on Dailymotion.

Use 'using Google' or 'I use Google' rather than 'do with Google.' 'There' is enough; avoid 'in there.' 'K-dramas' is the usual form. Use 'go on Google' not 'go in the googles.' 'Dailymotion' is a proper noun and should be spelled correctly; use 'on Dailymotion.' Also 'enjoy' fits better than 'love' repeated. Keep prepositions 'on' for websites/platforms.

× So I usually or discover new apps from my friends one my close friend who is very close to me and we love to share like some kind of news or apps about apps that gives like us comedy and K dramas vibes.

✓ I usually discover new apps from my friends, especially one friend who is very close to me, and we like to share news or apps that give us comedy and K-drama recommendations.

Remove unnecessary words 'or' and 'one.' Use 'especially' to clarify. 'Give us' not 'gives like us.' 'K-drama' as adjective. 'Share news or apps' is clearer than 'share like some kind of news or apps about apps.' Fix subject-verb agreement: 'apps that give' (plural subject) not 'gives.'

× He just suggest me one app called HITB I just recently downloaded.

✓ He just suggested one app called HITB, which I recently downloaded.

Sequence of tenses: use past tense 'suggested' for a past action. Also restructure to include relative clause 'which I recently downloaded.' Use commas to separate clauses.

× So I would definitely not leave on Instagram because as I said, I, I love to watch different kinds of content on the daily basis.

✓ I would definitely not leave Instagram because, as I said, I love to watch different kinds of content on a daily basis.

Use 'leave Instagram' not 'leave on Instagram.' Also 'on a daily basis' rather than 'on the daily basis.' Keep conditional 'would' and remove stutter. Maintain article usage.

× Mostly Indian peoples all uh, put contents about funny comedy reels and I love to watch umm, this and I don't wanna end the Instagram.

✓ Mostly Indian people post funny comedy reels, and I love to watch them, so I don't want to stop using Instagram.

'People' is plural without 'peoples' (which refers to ethnic groups). 'Post' not 'put.' 'Content' is uncountable; use 'reels' or 'videos.' Use 'them' to refer to the reels. 'I don't want to stop using Instagram' is clearer than 'I don't wanna end the Instagram.' Avoid informal contractions in formal correction or keep 'don't want'.