App— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Избегайте повторений и старайтесь использовать связующие слова для логичности. Например, начните с общего утверждения, затем добавьте детали, используя слова-связки.

例: Recently, I have been using Instagram a lot because it is very popular among both young and older people. I usually use it to read news stories, especially about fashion, which interests me a lot.

提案: Ответ должен быть более чётким и связным. Используйте правильные выражения и избегайте повторов. Добавьте связующие слова для плавности речи.

例: I am interested in trying TikTok because it appeals to both young and older people. On TikTok, you can watch fashion videos and learn about stories from different countries.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова и уточняйте детали, чтобы сделать ответ более информативным.

例: Actually, I am not very familiar with many apps, but I know Instagram, TikTok, and WhatsApp because they are very popular in my country. People often use WhatsApp to talk with their children who live far away.

提案: Ответ должен быть более чётким и логичным. Избегайте ошибок и повторов, используйте связующие слова и правильные выражения для описания своих предпочтений.

例: It's a difficult question, but I would choose Instagram and TikTok because they are very popular and offer a wide range of content. Through these apps, you can learn about different cultures from around the world.

× I'm recently using Instagram because Instagram nowadays Instagram is very popular among young people and old people.

✓ I have been using Instagram recently because Instagram is very popular nowadays among young and old people.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the present continuous tense 'I'm recently using' which is not appropriate with the adverb 'recently'. The present perfect continuous 'I have been using' correctly expresses an action that started in the recent past and continues to the present. Also, the phrase 'Instagram nowadays Instagram is very popular' is redundant and awkward; it is corrected to 'Instagram is very popular nowadays'.

× That's why I usually use Instagram to read news stories and news about about close about fashion.

✓ That's why I usually use Instagram to read news stories and news about fashion.

The phrase 'news about about close about fashion' contains repeated and incorrect prepositions. The correct preposition is 'about' used once before 'fashion'. The word 'close' is unnecessary and confusing in this context.

× Now I'm I'm going to try to use the TikTok because as you know, TikTok is going to trade on both young and older people.

✓ Now I'm going to try to use TikTok because, as you know, TikTok is popular among both young and older people.

The phrase 'TikTok is going to trade on both young and older people' is incorrect. The intended meaning is that TikTok is popular or used by both age groups. Also, 'the TikTok' is incorrect; app names generally do not take 'the'. The repetition 'I'm I'm' is a speech disfluency and should be corrected to 'I'm'.

× And there are you can and there are you can just calling to tell you can watch fashion and stories like an about other countries.

✓ And you can just watch fashion and stories about other countries.

The original sentence is confusing and contains incorrect phrases like 'there are you can' and 'calling to tell'. The corrected sentence simplifies the meaning and uses the correct preposition 'about' for 'stories about other countries'.

× Actually I'm not good at different apps but I only know Instagram, TikTok in WhatsApp because it's very popular in my country.

✓ Actually, I'm not good with different apps, but I only know Instagram, TikTok, and WhatsApp because they are very popular in my country.

The phrase 'not good at different apps' is better expressed as 'not good with different apps'. Also, 'in WhatsApp' is incorrect; it should be 'and WhatsApp'. The verb 'it's' refers to a singular subject, but here multiple apps are mentioned, so 'they are' is correct.

× People use WhatsApp to speak, to talk. They are children from afar away at home.

✓ People use WhatsApp to speak and talk. Their children are far away at home.

The phrase 'They are children from afar away at home' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. It is corrected to 'Their children are far away at home' to convey the intended meaning. Also, 'to speak, to talk' is redundant; 'to speak and talk' is smoother.

× It's really hard question because I will choose Instagram and tick to because they are really popular and you can't they're offers white white of a wide range of different culture.

✓ It's a really hard question because I would choose Instagram and TikTok since they are really popular and offer a wide range of different cultures.

The original sentence has multiple errors: missing article 'a' before 'really hard question', incorrect future tense 'I will choose' which should be conditional 'I would choose' to express preference, misspelling 'tick to' corrected to 'TikTok', and confusing phrase 'you can't they're offers white white of a wide range' corrected to 'offer a wide range'. Also, 'culture' should be plural 'cultures' to match 'different'.

× You can learn different culture at the different and. Foot.

✓ You can learn about different cultures from different countries.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'At the different and. Foot.' is nonsensical. The correction provides a clear and grammatically correct sentence conveying the intended meaning.