Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 중요 문법 오류와 어색한 표현을 바로잡아 자연스럽고 간결하게 말하세요. 특히 시제와 인칭, 대명사 사용을 고치고 문장을 논리적으로 연결하는 연결어를 사용하세요. 예: 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 사용하고, 불필요한 반복(예: 'I' 연속 사용)을 줄이며, ‘so’ 대신 'so I asked' 같은 구조를 간결히 정리하세요. 또한 숫자나 상황 설명을 더 구체적으로 덧붙이면 좋습니다.

例: Yes. Once I borrowed money for my transportation card from a stranger because I didn’t have any credit left and couldn’t take the bus. I politely explained my situation and the person kindly lent me enough to get home.

提案: 문장을 과거 시제로 일관되게 사용하고 어색한 표현과 불분명한 단어를 명확히 고치세요. 금액을 말할 때는 통화 단위를 포함하고, 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하세요. 또한 연결어를 사용해 이유와 결과를 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 예: 'I lent him about 40' 대신 'I lent him about $40 so he could pay the workshop fee.'처럼 말하세요.

例: Yes. Once I lent about $40 to a friend because he couldn’t afford the fee for a university workshop. I trusted him to pay me back after the event, and he returned the money a week later.

× Yes, I borrow the transportation card fee from strangers.

✓ Yes, I borrowed the transportation card fee from strangers.

The speaker is describing a past event so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'borrowed' (past form of 'borrow') to match the past-time reference. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when narrating completed actions (e.g., 'I borrowed money yesterday').

× Uh, because I have no money in my transportation card and I couldn't take the bus, so I asked some strangers and she borrowed me.

✓ Uh, because I had no money on my transportation card and I couldn't take the bus, so I asked some strangers and one of them lent me some money.

Several issues: 1) Past context requires 'had' not 'have' (past tense). 2) Preposition: use 'on my transportation card' not 'in'. 3) Pronoun 'she' is incorrect and unclear; use 'one of them' or 'a woman' and the verb 'lend' should be in past tense 'lent'. 4) English uses 'lend someone something' not 'borrow someone'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and correct verb-object order: 'one of them lent me some money' or 'a stranger lent me some money'. These corrections address tense, preposition and pronoun misuse.

× Yes, I I once I lend money to my friend because he had no money to participate the empty like university workshop.

✓ Yes, I once lent money to my friend because he had no money to participate in a university workshop.

The event is in the past so use past tense 'lent' (not 'lend'). Also the phrase 'participate the empty like university workshop' is ungrammatical: use the verb 'participate in' and remove unclear words like 'empty like'. Suggestion: simplify to 'to participate in a university workshop' and ensure verbs are in past tense when describing past actions.

× So I lent him about 40.

✓ So I lent him about 40 dollars.

The noun for the amount needs a unit (dollars, yuan, etc.). Without an article or currency word the sentence is incomplete. Suggestion: specify the currency or unit, e.g., 'about 40 dollars' or 'about 40 yuan', and keep past tense 'lent' which is already correct.