Money— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct tense and prepositions, and add one specific detail (amount, duration or how you repaid) using a linking phrase to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, I have once borrowed money when I went to study abroad. Specifically, my aunt in the United States lent me $2,000 to pay my tuition, and I repaid her within six months after I started working part-time.

提案: Keep the answer within a few well-structured sentences, use correct verb tense and remove hesitations. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give specific supporting details (amount, reason, repayment plan or outcome) using linking words to make it coherent.

例: Yes, I have lent money to a friend once. I lent her 50,000 pesos for a medical operation because she is a single mother and was struggling financially, and she repaid me in monthly installments over four months.

× I actually never borrowed money from anyone except the time I enrolled in another country.

✓ I have actually never borrowed money from anyone except for the time I enrolled in another country.

The speaker is referring to their life experience up to now, so the present perfect ('have never borrowed') is appropriate instead of simple past. Also the preposition 'except for' is needed to introduce the exception. Suggestion: Use present perfect for life experiences and include 'for' after 'except' when introducing a specific exception.

× I needed extra money, so my auntie from the United States let me, uh, some money in order for me to pay my tuition fee.

✓ I needed extra money, so my auntie from the United States lent me some money so I could pay my tuition fee.

The verb 'let' is incorrect here; the correct past form of 'lend' is 'lent'. The clause 'in order for me to pay' is wordy; 'so I could pay' is more natural. Also remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use 'lent' for giving money temporarily and use 'so I could' for purpose in past context.

× When my friend needed money, I lend her 50,000 pesos for her operation and I understood her umm condition because she is a single mom and she needed extra money.

✓ When my friend needed money, I lent her 50,000 pesos for her operation because she was a single mother and needed extra money.

The past tense of 'lend' is 'lent', not 'lend'. Use 'was' for 'she was a single mother' to keep past time consistency with 'needed'. Also 'operation' and amount are fine; remove filler 'umm'. Suggestion: Keep verbs consistent in past tense when describing past events and use 'mother' rather than informal 'mom' in formal responses.

× I didn't hesitate because I know her so well.

✓ I didn't hesitate because I knew her so well.

The action of not hesitating occurred in the past, so 'knew' should be past tense to match 'didn't hesitate'. Using present 'know' creates a tense mismatch. Suggestion: Ensure supporting verbs match the time frame of the main action.

× I know that she's been working hard and she needed money so I'm there.

✓ I knew that she had been working hard and needed money, so I was there to help.

The speaker describes past events: use past perfect progressive 'had been working' to show ongoing action before another past point, and 'needed' stays past. 'I'm there' should be past 'I was there'. Also add 'to help' to clarify purpose. Suggestion: Match tenses for past narratives and use past perfect progressive for actions that had been ongoing before another past action.