History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but lacks natural phrasing and clear structure. Try to start with a direct response, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and improve grammar, for example, use 'I was very interested in the subject and actively participated in class.'

例: Yes, I have studied history, especially during middle school. I was very interested in the subject and actively participated in class because I found the stories fascinating.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct plural and article usage, for example, say 'books contain a lot of information about history, so I can learn new facts and life lessons.'

例: I usually learn history from books because they contain a lot of information about past events. This way, I can discover new facts and also gain valuable life lessons.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words. For example, say 'One benefit of learning history is gaining life lessons by understanding the experiences of important figures.'

例: In my opinion, one benefit of learning history is that we can gain life lessons by studying the lives and decisions of historical figures.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. For example, say 'Yes, I believe learning history is important because it helps citizens understand their national identity and gain wisdom from past experiences.'

例: Yes, I believe learning history is important because it helps citizens understand their national identity and also gain wisdom from past experiences, which is crucial in our lives.

× Yes. When I was in middle school I studied history, so when I learnt about the subject I was excited.

✓ Yes. When I was in middle school, I studied history, so when I learned about the subject, I was excited.

The verb 'learnt' is a correct past tense form in British English, but 'learned' is more common in American English. Since the rest of the text uses American English conventions, 'learned' is preferred for consistency. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× So I involved in the class hard.

✓ So I was involved in the class and worked hard.

The original sentence lacks a proper verb form and structure. 'Involved' needs an auxiliary verb 'was' to form the past passive voice, and 'hard' should be connected to 'worked' to express effort. This correction clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× In my case, I learn history from books.

✓ In my case, I learn history from books.

The sentence is in present tense and correctly uses 'learn' to express a habitual action. No correction needed here.

× Since books have many informations, information about history, I can learn new facts and I can get life lessons.

✓ Since books have much information about history, I can learn new facts and get life lessons.

'Information' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. 'Many informations' is incorrect; 'much information' is correct. Also, 'I can get life lessons' is simplified by removing the repeated subject for smoother flow.

× In my opinion, the other advantages of learning history is getting life lessons since many people Since people can see a process of a figure's life, it's a good.

✓ In my opinion, another advantage of learning history is getting life lessons since people can see the process of a figure's life; it's good.

'Advantages' is plural, so 'is' should be 'are' if 'advantages' is kept. However, the sentence is better with singular 'advantage' to match 'is'. Also, repeated phrase 'Since many people Since people' is redundant and corrected. 'A process' is changed to 'the process' for specificity. The sentence is restructured for clarity.