History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and some awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and natural by limiting filler words like 'uh' and 'ah'.

例: Yes, I studied history during my school years. I often read historical books and visited the library to learn more about past events in my free time.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Use past tense consistently and try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Avoid filler words and be more specific about your learning methods.

例: I learned history mainly at school, where my teachers explained historical events, including various wars and important developments.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Focus on giving a clear opinion with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition. Also, complete your sentences fully.

例: Learning history is beneficial because it helps us understand past events, which can guide us in making better decisions professionally and personally.

提案: Your answer is hesitant and incomplete. Try to give a clear opinion and support it with reasons. Avoid filler words and finish your thoughts fully. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

例: I believe learning history is important because it helps us understand past events and how society functions, which can improve our role in the community.

× At that time, I allowed to reading historical books and I also visited to the library.

✓ At that time, I was allowed to read historical books and I also visited the library.

The phrase 'allowed to reading' is incorrect because after 'allowed to' the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Also, 'visited to the library' is incorrect; the verb 'visit' does not require the preposition 'to'. The correct form is 'visited the library'.

× I also visited to the library.

✓ I also visited the library.

The verb 'visit' is directly followed by the object without a preposition. Using 'to' after 'visited' is incorrect.

× Uh, in my leisure time, I usually read the history books and know about the past events.

✓ Uh, in my leisure time, I usually read history books and learn about past events.

The phrase 'know about the past events' is incorrect in this context because 'know' is a stative verb and does not fit well with the habitual action described. 'Learn about' is more appropriate to express gaining knowledge.

× Usually I learn history, uh, when I was in school and that time my teachers teach me the lessons of history and told us about the historical events and different kind of wars and other things.

✓ Usually I learned history when I was in school, and at that time my teachers taught me the lessons of history and told us about historical events, different kinds of wars, and other things.

The sentence mixes present tense 'learn' and 'teach' with past tense 'was' and 'told'. Since the action happened in the past, all verbs should be in the past tense: 'learned' and 'taught'. Also, 'different kind' should be pluralized to 'different kinds' to agree with the plural noun 'wars'.

× different kind of wars

✓ different kinds of wars

When referring to multiple types, 'kinds' should be plural and followed by 'of' to correctly modify the plural noun 'wars'.

× I think there are some benefits of learning history because if we will learn, if we learn the history, it will help us to grow in very professional way.

✓ I think there are some benefits of learning history because if we learn history, it will help us grow in a very professional way.

The phrase 'if we will learn' is incorrect because in conditional sentences, the present tense is used after 'if' to indicate future possibility. Also, 'help us to grow' can be simplified to 'help us grow'. The article 'a' is needed before 'very professional way'.

× It help us to know the, uh, past events which are happening in the.

✓ It helps us to know past events that have happened.

The sentence is incomplete and uses 'the' incorrectly before 'past events'. Also, 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. The phrase 'which are happening in the' is incomplete and unclear; it is better to say 'that have happened' to refer to past events.

× It help us to know the, uh, past events which are happening in the.

✓ It helps us to know past events that have happened.

The verb 'help' must agree with the singular subject 'it', so it should be 'helps'.

× Yes, because it help us to know about the past events and, uh, give us a better idea that how we can work into this society.

✓ Yes, because it helps us to know about past events and gives us a better idea of how we can work in this society.

The verbs 'help' and 'give' should be in third person singular form 'helps' and 'gives' to agree with 'it'. Also, 'that how' is incorrect; it should be 'of how'. The preposition 'into' is incorrect here; 'in' is appropriate.

× Yes, because it help us to know about the past events and, uh, give us a better idea that how we can work into this society.

✓ Yes, because it helps us to know about past events and gives us a better idea of how we can work in this society.

The verbs 'help' and 'give' must be conjugated as 'helps' and 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× give us a better idea that how we can work into this society.

✓ give us a better idea of how we can work in this society.

The phrase 'idea that how' is incorrect; it should be 'idea of how'. Also, the preposition 'into' is incorrect in this context; 'in' is the correct preposition to indicate being part of society.