History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều từ ngữ thừa và lặp lại, ví dụ như "umm", "uh", và một số lỗi ngữ pháp như "I'm remember" thay vì "I remember". Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I remember studying history when I was a student because it is a compulsory subject in Vietnam. I think it is important as it broadens my understanding of the present and helps me appreciate my country more.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng quá nhiều từ ngữ thừa như "umm", "uh" và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như "looking out for" thành "look for". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và có cấu trúc mạch lạc với liên từ phù hợp để tăng tính logic.

例: When I was younger, I used to learn history through the Internet, television, and my smartphone because they are great resources for researching information. However, nowadays, I am quite busy, so I don't have much time to study history.

提案: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và thiếu sự liên kết giữa các ý. Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ như "for example", "in addition" để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và sửa lỗi như "can aware" thành "can be aware" hoặc "become aware".

例: There are many benefits to learning history. For example, students can become aware of their roots and appreciate the culture and traditions of their country. In addition, it helps to instill a sense of identity and patriotism.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp lại cụm từ "aware of your roots" và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như "While thing" thành "Well, I think". Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ được liên kết tốt.

例: Well, I think learning history is very important because it reflects the culture and traditions of previous generations. It helps people become aware of their roots and feel more connected to their country and culture.

× I'm remember learning about history when I was a student because in Vietnam, umm, history is a compulsory subject, but umm, for me, I think it is a important subject because it, uh, can broaden my knowledge about, uh, what I have today and make me appreciate my country and my.

✓ I remember learning about history when I was a student because in Vietnam, umm, history is a compulsory subject, but umm, for me, I think it is an important subject because it, uh, can broaden my knowledge about, uh, what I have today and make me appreciate my country and my.

The phrase 'I'm remember' is incorrect because 'remember' is a stative verb and should be used in the simple present tense, not the present continuous. Also, 'a important' should be 'an important' because 'important' starts with a vowel sound.

× I think it is a important subject because it, uh, can broaden my knowledge about, uh, what I have today and make me appreciate my country and my.

✓ I think it is an important subject because it, uh, can broaden my knowledge about, uh, what I have today and make me appreciate my country and my.

The article 'a' is incorrect before the word 'important' because 'important' starts with a vowel sound, so the correct article is 'an'.

× I used to learn history, umm, on the Internet or television or smartphone because I think it is a, uh, it is a great source resource for you to, uh, research and looking out for some information that you need.

✓ I used to learn history, umm, on the Internet or television or smartphone because I think it is a, uh, it is a great resource for you to, uh, research and look out for some information that you need.

The phrase 'research and looking out' is incorrect because after 'to' (infinitive marker), the base form of the verb should be used. Therefore, 'looking' should be 'look'.

× But nowadays when I busy as a base, I don't have a lot of time to study more about history.

✓ But nowadays, when I am busy as a base, I don't have a lot of time to study more about history.

The phrase 'when I busy' is incorrect because the verb 'to be' is missing. The correct form is 'when I am busy'.

× Well, think there's a lot of advantage of learning history.

✓ Well, I think there are a lot of advantages of learning history.

The word 'advantage' should be plural 'advantages' because it refers to multiple benefits. Also, 'there's' (there is) should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun.

× Like if student learn more about history, they can aware their roots and can, can appreciate more about the cultural and tradition in the country.

✓ Like if students learn more about history, they can be aware of their roots and can appreciate more about the culture and traditions in the country.

The noun 'student' should be plural 'students' to agree with the plural verb 'learn'. Also, 'aware' needs the verb 'be' to form 'be aware'. 'The cultural and tradition' should be 'the culture and traditions' for correct noun forms.

× Like if student learn more about history, they can aware their roots and can, can appreciate more about the cultural and tradition in the country.

✓ Like if students learn more about history, they can be aware of their roots and can appreciate more about the culture and traditions in the country.

The phrase 'aware their roots' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'aware of'. Also, 'appreciate more about' is acceptable but 'appreciate more' is better without 'about'.

× And in addition, it can help them to uh, instill their identity and umm, patriotism.

✓ And in addition, it can help them to, uh, instill their identity and, umm, patriotism.

No grammatical error in pronouns here; the sentence is acceptable. Minor punctuation added for clarity.

× While thing, learning history is very important because for me history is a reflection of cultural and tradition in the previous generation and learning about history can make you aware about your roots, aware of your roots and can also make you feel more connected with your country and your culture.

✓ Well, I think learning history is very important because, for me, history is a reflection of the culture and traditions of previous generations, and learning about history can make you aware of your roots and also make you feel more connected with your country and your culture.

The phrase 'While thing' is incorrect; it should be 'Well, I think'. Also, 'a reflection of cultural and tradition' should be 'a reflection of the culture and traditions'. 'Previous generation' should be plural 'previous generations'. Repetition of 'aware about your roots, aware of your roots' is redundant; corrected to 'aware of your roots'.