History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi hataları ve anlam belirsizlikleri var. Cümlenizi daha doğal ve akıcı yapmak için, neden bu imparatorlukları sevdiğinizi açık ve net bir şekilde ifade edin. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi 5 cümleyi geçmeyecek şekilde tutun ve gereksiz tekrarları önleyin.

例: Yes, I have studied a lot of history, especially about powerful empires like the British, Ottoman, and French Empires. I find them fascinating because they were very influential in their centuries. Also, I am interested in how they managed economic challenges during their time.

提案: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi ve kelime kullanımı hataları mevcut. Cümlenizi daha doğal ve anlaşılır yapmak için, öğrenme yöntemlerinizi açıkça belirtin ve neden tercih ettiğinizi açıklayın. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi mantıklı bağlaçlarla birbirine bağlayın.

例: I usually learn history at school because I find textbooks and teachers' lessons reliable. Sometimes, I also use the Internet to find additional information, but I prefer school learning since it is more structured and enjoyable.

提案: Cevabınızda anlam bozuklukları ve dilbilgisi hataları var. Daha açık ve mantıklı cümleler kurarak, tarih öğrenmenin faydalarını net bir şekilde ifade edin. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizde bağlaçlar kullanarak akıcılığı artırın.

例: Learning history helps us understand how our country expanded its territory and dealt with economic problems. For example, by studying immigration policies in the past, we can better understand current social issues. Therefore, knowing history allows us to comprehend today's world more clearly.

提案: Cümleniz anlam açısından karışık ve dilbilgisi hataları içeriyor. Düşüncelerinizi daha açık ve doğru bir şekilde ifade etmek için, tarih öğrenmenin önemini net cümlelerle açıklayın ve alıntıyı daha doğru kullanın.

例: I believe learning history is important because it helps us understand the reasons behind our country's successes and failures. For instance, by studying past economic crises, we can prepare better for the future.

× I studied a lot of country history in the past.

✓ I studied a lot of countries' history in the past.

The phrase 'a lot of country history' is incorrect because 'country' should be plural possessive to indicate history belonging to multiple countries. The correct form is 'countries' history.'

× Why These are my favorite because of they are powerful in their century and secondly, they had a economic sickness.

✓ These are my favorites because they were powerful in their centuries and secondly, they had an economic sickness.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun usage and article usage. 'Why These are' is incorrect; it should be 'These are.' 'Because of they are' should be 'because they were.' 'Century' should be plural 'centuries' to match multiple empires. 'A economic' should be 'an economic' because 'economic' starts with a vowel sound.

× How How they?

✓ How did they?

The sentence is incomplete and lacks auxiliary verb for question formation. The correct question form is 'How did they?'

× I learn history in school, sometimes I learn an Internet, but I usually prefer school because textbooks and notebooks and teachers lessons are reliable for me and secondly they when they're teaching us.

✓ I learn history at school, sometimes I learn on the Internet, but I usually prefer school because textbooks, notebooks, and teachers' lessons are reliable for me and secondly, when they're teaching us, it really amuses me.

Incorrect prepositions 'in school' should be 'at school'; 'learn an Internet' should be 'learn on the Internet.' Missing possessive apostrophe in 'teachers lessons' should be 'teachers' lessons.' The sentence structure is awkward and incomplete; added missing parts for clarity.

× It is really making amuses me actually if.

✓ It really amuses me actually.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and incomplete. The correct form is 'It really amuses me actually.'

× Benefits are, for example, you can lend your country past what how did they conquer the lands or how did they church the economic sickness?

✓ Benefits are, for example, you can learn your country's past, how they conquered lands or how they cured the economic sickness.

'Lend your country past' is incorrect; it should be 'learn your country's past.' 'Church the economic sickness' is incorrect; likely intended 'cure the economic sickness.' Also, 'conquer the lands' should be 'conquered lands.'

× How did they church the economic sickness? How did they handle the immigrations, for example.

✓ How did they cure the economic sickness? How did they handle immigration, for example?

'Church' is incorrect verb; should be 'cure.' 'Immigrations' is incorrect plural; 'immigration' is uncountable and should be singular.

× And secondly, you can't understand the if you understand your country past, you can understand today too.

✓ And secondly, if you understand your country's past, you can understand today too.

The sentence has an unnecessary 'you can't understand the if' which is confusing and incorrect. The correct structure is conditional: 'if you understand your country's past...'

× I think it is because I had a quote from 2000 Turk.

✓ I think it is because I heard a quote from a Turk in 2000.

'Had a quote' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'heard a quote.' Also, '2000 Turk' is unclear; it should be 'a Turk in 2000.'

× He told us. If you learn your country history in the past, you can finally understand how did they fall for your future?

✓ He told us, 'If you learn your country's history in the past, you can finally understand how they fell for your future.'

The sentence is incorrectly punctuated and structured. Direct speech should be quoted properly. Also, 'how did they fall' is incorrect question form inside statement; it should be 'how they fell.'

× How did they fall for your economic sickness, for example?

✓ How they fell because of economic sickness, for example.

The sentence is a question form but used as a statement; it should be rephrased to fit the context. Also, 'fall for your economic sickness' is unclear; 'fell because of economic sickness' is clearer.