History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như cách dùng từ chưa tự nhiên. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng hơn.

例: Yes, I have studied history at school and also watched documentaries about world and Vietnamese history. However, I don't find it very interesting.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, tránh dùng các câu không hoàn chỉnh hoặc thiếu rõ ràng.

例: My teacher usually explains historical events and their dates, then I take notes and memorize them. However, I don't enjoy this method of learning very much.

提案: Bạn nên mở rộng câu trả lời với các chi tiết cụ thể hơn và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn. Hãy tránh dùng từ không chính xác như 'maybe' trong trường hợp này.

例: Learning history helps us understand past events and learn from them. For example, politicians can use historical knowledge to make better decisions.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn chưa hoàn chỉnh và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên hoàn thiện câu, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn.

例: Although I don't like history, I believe it is important, especially for young people, to understand the struggles of previous generations who fought for our country.

× Yeah, I've been taught a lot about history in my school as well as I have watched several videos of histories like the world history or Vietnam's history.

✓ Yeah, I've been taught a lot about history in my school as well as I have watched several videos about history like world history or Vietnam's history.

The phrase 'videos of histories' is incorrect because 'history' is an uncountable noun in this context and should not be pluralized. The correct preposition is 'about' when referring to the subject of videos. Therefore, 'videos about history' is correct.

× Yeah, I've been taught a lot about history in my school as well as I have watched several videos of histories like the world history or Vietnam's history.

✓ Yeah, I've been taught a lot about history in my school as well as I have watched several videos about history like world history or Vietnam's history.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used here. When referring to the subject matter of videos, the correct preposition is 'about'. Hence, 'videos about history' is the correct form.

× Although despite all of that watching and knowledge, I still have no interest in history.

✓ Despite all of that watching and knowledge, I still have no interest in history.

Using both 'Although' and 'despite' together is redundant because they serve the same purpose. Only one should be used to introduce the contrast.

× A school teacher taught me about the event in which years? Something like that, and I'll have to write down the lesson the next day.

✓ A school teacher taught me about the events in which years? Something like that, and I'll have to write down the lesson the next day.

The phrase 'the event in which years' is awkward and unclear. It would be better to say 'about the events and the years in which they happened' or rephrase for clarity. Also, 'event' should be plural if referring to multiple events.

× I will have to memorize the lesson that I had the day before.

✓ I had to memorize the lesson that I had the day before.

The sentence is describing a past routine, so 'will have to' (future) is incorrect. The past tense 'had to' should be used to indicate obligation in the past.

× But I don't feel like I like this way of learning.

✓ But I don't feel like I like this way of learning.

This sentence is grammatically correct but stylistically awkward. A better phrasing would be 'But I don't like this way of learning.' However, since it does not violate the grammar problem list, no correction is made.

× And maybe if you become a politician you can be more strategic.

✓ Maybe if you become a politician, you can be more strategic.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is often unnecessary and can be omitted for better style. Also, a comma is needed after the conditional clause for clarity.

× Despite hating history, I would definitely say that studying history is really important, especially for the young generation, for them for us to understand more about the last generation that fight for the.

✓ Despite hating history, I would definitely say that studying history is really important, especially for the young generation, for them and for us to understand more about the last generation that fought for the country.

The phrase 'for them for us' is missing a conjunction 'and' to connect the two pronouns. Also, 'fight' should be in past tense 'fought' to agree with the past action. The sentence is incomplete and needs 'country' or an object to complete the thought.