History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法和表达稍显不自然，且句子较长，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并使用更准确的词汇。

例: Yes, I studied history mainly in Senior High School, where I even chose it as a major. I find history fascinating because it helps me understand my ancestors and past events.

提案: 回答内容有些偏离主题，提及“四大名著”不太相关，建议紧扣问题，使用连贯的连接词，并提供具体学习方法。

例: I learn history mainly through school courses and by watching educational videos online. These methods help me understand historical events more clearly.

提案: 回答较完整，但句子结构复杂且有些冗长，建议分句表达，使用更自然的连接词，使表达更流畅。

例: Learning history broadens our horizons and helps us understand past events. Moreover, it provides valuable lessons that can guide future development and promote harmony between countries.

提案: 回答表达清晰，但句式较为简单，建议使用更多连接词和丰富词汇，使表达更自然且有逻辑。

例: Definitely, learning history is important because it helps us understand the past and gain experience for future progress. Additionally, studying other countries' histories broadens our horizons and exposes us to diverse cultures.

× I have history courses especially during my Senior High School and I choose history as my major courses.

✓ I had history courses especially during my Senior High School and I chose history as my major course.

这里涉及复数和单数的问题。'history courses'在这里可以用复数，但'major courses'应为单数'major course'，因为通常一个专业是单数形式。并且时态应与过去时间一致，故将have改为had，choose改为chose。

× I have history courses especially during my Senior High School and I choose history as my major courses.

✓ I had history courses especially during my Senior High School and I chose history as my major course.

描述过去经历时，动词应使用过去时态。'have'和'choose'应改为'had'和'chose'。

× I think history courses are quite interesting and let me know about my ancestors and the past time.

✓ I think history courses are quite interesting and let me know about my ancestors and the past.

'the past time'表达不自然，通常用'the past'表示过去的时间。

× Well, I learned about history in several ways.

✓ Well, I learn about history in several ways.

根据上下文，学生描述的是一般情况，应该使用一般现在时，故将'learned'改为'learn'。

× For example, I often watch online videos to learn some historical knowledge and also as I mentioned before, I learned through history courses.

✓ For example, I often watch online videos to learn some historical knowledge and also, as I mentioned before, I learn through history courses.

时态应保持一致，描述习惯性动作用一般现在时，故将'learned'改为'learn'。

× Plus I think in Chinese everyone know the four great classical novels.

✓ Plus I think in China everyone knows the four great classical novels.

'in Chinese'应为'in China'表示地点；'everyone'为第三人称单数，动词应加s，故'know'改为'knows'。

× While learning history can not only broaden our horizon, but also let us know what happened in the past, and it can help us accumulate some experience for the future development of countries and build up a harmonious relationship with other countries.

✓ Learning history can not only broaden our horizons, but also let us know what happened in the past. It can help us accumulate experience for the future development of countries and build up harmonious relationships with other countries.

句子结构复杂且不够清晰，建议拆分为两个句子；'horizon'应为复数'horizons'；'a harmonious relationship'改为复数'harmonious relationships'更符合语境。

× While learning history can not only broaden our horizon, but also let us know what happened in the past, and it can help us accumulate some experience for the future development of countries and build up a harmonious relationship with other countries.

✓ Learning history can not only broaden our horizons, but also let us know what happened in the past. It can help us accumulate experience for the future development of countries and build up harmonious relationships with other countries.

'some experience'中'some'可省略，'experience'作为不可数名词不需要量词。

× And also learning histories of other countries can broaden our horizon, let us know different people and different culture.

✓ Also, learning the histories of other countries can broaden our horizons, let us know different people and different cultures.

'histories'前加定冠词'the'；'horizon'应为复数'horizons'；'culture'应为复数'cultures'，因为指不同的文化。