History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ancak daha akıcı ve etkili olması için, geçmiş ve gelecek zamanları daha doğru kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlenizi biraz daha genişleterek neden tarih derslerini sevdiğinizi veya tarih öğrenmenin sizin için neden önemli olduğunu belirtebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I studied history in 9th grade and I am going to continue learning it in 10th grade because I find it fascinating to understand how past events shape our present.

提案: Cümlenizde bazı dilbilgisi hataları var ve cümleleriniz biraz kısa ve kopuk. Bağlaçları doğru kullanarak cümlelerinizi daha akıcı hale getirebilirsiniz. Ayrıca, 'to improving' yerine 'to improve' kullanmalısınız.

例: Our teachers teach us history at school, and I also watch history lessons on YouTube to improve my knowledge.

提案: Cümleniz biraz uzun ve tekrarlayıcı. Daha kısa ve net cümleler kurarak, bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlenizi daha etkili yapabilirsiniz. Ayrıca, 'know them properly' ifadesi yerine daha uygun bir ifade kullanabilirsiniz.

例: Learning history helps us understand our ancestors and their actions, which allows us to appreciate our culture better.

提案: Cümlenizde 'helps to learning' ifadesi yanlış. Doğrusu 'helps us learn' olmalıdır. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha akıcı yapmak için bağlaçları doğru kullanmalısınız.

例: I think learning history is very important because it helps us learn from past mistakes and avoid repeating them.

× Also. I'm watching history lessons from YouTube to improving my history knowledge.

✓ Also, I'm watching history lessons from YouTube to improve my history knowledge.

The verb 'to' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. 'To improving' is incorrect; it should be 'to improve'. This is a common error with infinitive verbs.

× The benefits of learning history are you know who your ancestors are and what they did in the past so you can know them properly and you can learn more about your culture.

✓ The benefits of learning history are that you know who your ancestors are and what they did in the past, so you can understand them properly and learn more about your culture.

The sentence lacks the conjunction 'that' after 'are' to introduce the clause. Also, 'know them properly' is better expressed as 'understand them properly' for clarity. The sentence is long and needs commas to separate ideas for better readability.

× I think it's really important to learn history because it helps to learning from the past, so you shouldn't do the same mistakes as your ancestors.

✓ I think it's really important to learn history because it helps to learn from the past, so you shouldn't make the same mistakes as your ancestors.

After 'helps to', the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. 'Helps to learning' is incorrect; it should be 'helps to learn'. Also, 'do the same mistakes' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'make the same mistakes'.