History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and grammatically correct by directly answering the question and providing clear supporting details without redundancy.

例: Yes, I have studied history in high school because it was a compulsory subject. My teacher explained many important historical events, which helped me understand the past better.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Focus on structuring your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid repetition and improve sentence fluency.

例: In high school, I learned history from my teacher during classes. However, now at university, I prefer to learn history through online videos because they cover a wide range of topics.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Use linking words to organize your points logically and provide specific examples or reasons to support your answer.

例: Learning history is beneficial because it teaches us valuable lessons from past mistakes. For example, by understanding previous conflicts, we can avoid repeating them and build a better future.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrases. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use correct vocabulary. Also, provide specific reasons to support your opinion.

例: Yes, learning history is important because it provides us with knowledge and guidance for life. It helps us understand our past and how human society has developed over time.

× And our teacher would teach me a lot about several historical events so I can known that better.

✓ And our teacher would teach me a lot about several historical events so I could know them better.

The phrase 'I can known' is incorrect because 'known' is the past participle form and cannot be used with 'can' in this way. The correct modal verb phrase is 'could know' to express ability in the past. Also, 'that' should be 'them' to refer to 'several historical events' (plural).

× In high school right from learn from my teacher because my teacher will conduct as some history history class.

✓ In high school, I learned from my teacher because my teacher conducted some history classes.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and structure. 'Right from learn' is ungrammatical; it should be 'I learned' to indicate past action. 'Will conduct as some history history class' is incorrect; 'conducted some history classes' is the correct past tense form. Also, 'history history' is a repetition error.

× But now in university I prefer learn history from some video online which is which has a very wide variety of topics of history.

✓ But now at university, I prefer to learn history from some videos online which have a very wide variety of history topics.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by 'to learn' (infinitive form). 'Video' should be plural 'videos' to match 'a very wide variety'. Also, 'which is which has' is redundant; 'which have' is correct to agree with plural 'videos'. The phrase 'topics of history' is better as 'history topics' for natural English.

× There is a saying goes history is the teacher, so if you learn from history you can have a better future.

✓ There is a saying that goes 'history is the teacher,' so if you learn from history, you can have a better future.

The phrase 'There is a saying goes' is incorrect; it should be 'There is a saying that goes' to properly introduce the saying. Also, commas are needed to separate clauses for clarity.

× And it can, people can learn the mistake in the future in the history and fix it better.

✓ And people can learn from the mistakes in history and fix them better in the future.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used to refer to 'mistakes' which is plural; 'them' is correct. Also, 'the mistake in the future in the history' is awkward; the corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects preposition use.

× Yes, it is quite important because not only can they bring us some good knowledge and to give us a lot of guidance to live our life better, but we can know our pads and know how humanity has been shaved.

✓ Yes, it is quite important because not only can it bring us good knowledge and give us a lot of guidance to live our lives better, but we can know our past and understand how humanity has evolved.

The pronoun 'they' is incorrect when referring to 'learning history'; 'it' is correct. 'Pads' is a typo for 'past'. 'Has been shaved' is incorrect and unclear; 'has evolved' is a better expression. Also, 'our life' should be plural 'our lives'.