History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to give a direct response with clear sentences and avoid redundancy. Use simple and correct grammar to express your experience with history studies.

例: Yes, I have studied history as part of my first-year compulsory subjects at university. I read a history book and did well in the related assignments.

提案: Your answer is relevant but needs better structure and linking words. Try to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid repetition. Also, be more specific about the types of books or movies you watch.

例: I learn history by reading books and watching historical dramas or movies, which I find fascinating. These help me understand historical events better, and I enjoy watching them very much.

提案: Your answer is vague and contains unclear phrases. Try to give specific benefits of learning history and explain them clearly. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

例: Learning history helps us understand different cultures and traditions, including their food and customs. Moreover, it allows us to learn from past events and understand our own identity.

提案: Your answer shows agreement but is repetitive and unclear. Try to express your opinion clearly with supporting reasons and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: Yes, I believe learning history is important because it helps us understand the events that shaped our country and society. By studying history, we can learn from past mistakes and appreciate our heritage.

× Yes, I have as I'm a student and I am starting so lousy, but I have a compulsory subject in my first year, which was a story.

✓ Yes, I have as I'm a student and I am starting so late, but I have a compulsory subject in my first year, which was history.

The word 'lousy' is incorrectly used here; it means 'bad' or 'poor quality' which does not fit the context. The intended meaning seems to be 'late' or 'just starting'. Also, 'a story' should be 'history' to correctly refer to the subject. This is a vocabulary misuse rather than a grammar error, but correcting it improves clarity.

× So I have to read that book and I was quite I did a quite good job and I got a.

✓ So I had to read that book and I did quite a good job and I got a good grade.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. 'Have to' should be 'had to' to match the past context. 'I was quite I did a quite good job' is ungrammatical; it should be 'I did quite a good job'. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'I got a good grade' completes the thought. This correction aligns the verb tenses and improves sentence structure.

× Obviously by reading books and watching some kind of dramas or movies which helps me to know about history and also.

✓ Obviously by reading books and watching some kinds of dramas or movies which help me to learn about history as well.

'Some kind of dramas or movies' should be 'some kinds of dramas or movies' to correctly express variety. Also, 'helps' should be 'help' to agree with the plural subject 'dramas or movies'. 'Know about history' is better expressed as 'learn about history'. The sentence is incomplete; adding 'as well' completes the thought. These corrections fix subject-verb agreement and preposition usage.

× It is very fascinating to watch such kind of movies.

✓ It is very fascinating to watch such kinds of movies.

The phrase 'such kind of movies' is incorrect; it should be 'such kinds of movies' to correctly express the plural form. This is a preposition and quantifier usage issue.

× I really enjoyed this kind of movies and I am eager to watch.

✓ I really enjoy these kinds of movies and I am eager to watch more.

'This kind of movies' is incorrect; it should be 'these kinds of movies' to match plural 'movies'. 'Enjoyed' is past tense but the context suggests a general statement, so present tense 'enjoy' is better. 'I am eager to watch' is incomplete; adding 'more' completes the sentence. This fixes pronoun and tense usage.

× I think there is a lot of things we know learning about his story, like their cultures, their cuisines and so on.

✓ I think there are a lot of things we know by learning about history, like their cultures, their cuisines and so on.

'There is a lot of things' is incorrect; 'things' is plural so it should be 'there are a lot of things'. 'His story' should be 'history'. This corrects subject-verb agreement and word choice.

× And in addition, I am very much fascinated about their stories and we also know The Who is our end.

✓ And in addition, I am very much fascinated by their stories and we also know who our ancestors are.

'Fascinated about' should be 'fascinated by'. 'The Who is our end' is unclear and likely incorrect; it should be 'who our ancestors are' to make sense. This fixes preposition and pronoun usage and clarifies meaning.

× Yes, definitely. I think learning his story is important because sometimes we didn't know about everything like what happened before in our country, what is our history.

✓ Yes, definitely. I think learning history is important because sometimes we don't know about everything, like what happened before in our country, what our history is.

'Didn't know' is past tense but the context is general, so present tense 'don't know' is appropriate. 'His story' should be 'history'. 'What is our history' should be 'what our history is' for correct word order in indirect question. This corrects tense and word order.

× Through his story, learning we should we can get to know about everything what happened first.

✓ Through learning history, we can get to know everything that happened before.

The sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. 'Through his story, learning we should we can' is incorrect; it should be 'Through learning history, we can'. 'Everything what happened first' should be 'everything that happened before'. This fixes sentence structure and conjunction use.