History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more fluent and natural by avoiding short, broken sentences. Also, correct grammar mistakes and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of saying 'As I have studied the history. Since I was young until now,' say 'I have studied history since I was young and continue to be interested in it because my major is political science.'

例: I have studied history since I was young and continue to be interested in it because my major is political science. This background motivates me to watch history-related programs regularly.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid unnecessary fillers. Use linking words like 'and' or 'also' properly to connect ideas. For example, say 'I learn history from many sources, but my favorite is watching YouTube videos. I also enjoy reading books by international authors.'

例: I learn history from many sources, but my favorite is watching YouTube videos. I also enjoy reading books by international authors to deepen my understanding.

提案: Try to form complete sentences and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Be more specific by explaining how history helps understand present and future events. For example, 'Learning history helps us understand current international relations and predict future developments.'

例: I think learning history has many benefits. For example, it helps us understand current international relations and even predict future events by studying the past interactions between countries.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say 'Yes, I believe everyone should learn history because it enables us to analyze global events, such as the war involving Russia.'

例: Yes, I believe everyone should learn history because it enables us to analyze global events, such as the war involving Russia, more effectively.

× As I have studied the history.

✓ I have studied history.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'the history' with the present perfect tense. 'History' is an uncountable noun here and does not need 'the'. Also, 'As' is unnecessary and makes the sentence incomplete. The corrected sentence uses the present perfect tense correctly without 'the'.

× Since I was young until now, I am interested in history becauses my major is political science.

✓ Since I was young until now, I have been interested in history because my major is political science.

The phrase 'Since I was young until now' requires the present perfect tense 'have been interested' to indicate an action continuing to the present. 'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. The correction fixes tense and spelling errors.

× So. It lead me to. Watch History all the time.

✓ So, it led me to watch history all the time.

The original sentence is fragmented and incorrectly capitalizes 'History'. 'Lead' should be in past tense 'led' to match the past action. The corrected sentence is a complete sentence with proper punctuation and verb tense.

× Alida bend the in a lot of sources but the most favorite one for me watching YouTube videos.

✓ I learn from a lot of sources, but my favorite one is watching YouTube videos.

The original sentence contains unclear words 'Alida bend the' and incorrect structure. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× And additionally as well as I like. Read books about international authors to.

✓ Additionally, I like to read books by international authors as well.

The original sentence is fragmented and uses redundant conjunctions 'And additionally as well as'. The correction removes redundancy and forms a complete sentence.

× I think the benefits are many, but the most important one is learning history.

✓ I think there are many benefits, but the most important one is learning history.

The original sentence is understandable but missing 'there are' to correctly express existence of benefits. The correction adds 'there are' for grammatical correctness.

× Make you understand the the present or even the future well.

✓ It helps you understand the present or even the future well.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb. The correction adds 'It helps' to form a complete sentence. Also, 'the the' is a typo corrected to 'the'.

× And that is related to international relations between countries.

✓ And that is related to international relations among countries.

'Between' is typically used for two entities; 'among' is more appropriate for more than two countries. The correction improves preposition usage.

× If you read about two countries history, you will be able to understand.

✓ If you read about the history of two countries, you will be able to understand.

The phrase 'two countries history' is incorrect; it should be 'the history of two countries'. The correction fixes noun phrase structure.

× Yes, I think every person has to learn history, and I think history is important because as I mentioned, the.

✓ Yes, I think every person has to learn history, and I think history is important because, as I mentioned,

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'the.' which is incomplete. The correction removes the incomplete word and adds commas for clarity.

× You are if you were learn history, you will be able to analyze everything in the world or any event in the world, for example the war between Russia.

✓ If you learn history, you will be able to analyze everything in the world or any event in the world, for example, the war involving Russia.

The phrase 'You are if you were learn history' is incorrect. It should be 'If you learn history'. Also, 'the war between Russia' is incomplete; it should specify the other party or say 'involving Russia'. The correction fixes pronoun and verb usage and clarifies the example.