History— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to make your answer clearer and more organized. Start with a direct answer, then add specific details without repeating words. Avoid grammar mistakes and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I have studied history, mostly about my country and other countries. I especially enjoy learning about past events and cultures, including wars.

提案: In English (Cambodia), give a clear and connected answer. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid short, choppy sentences. Mention specific methods clearly.

例: I learn history efficiently by watching videos on YouTube and TikTok, reading textbooks, and answering questions. Listening to people talk about history also helps me understand better.

提案: In English (Cambodia), try to organize your ideas clearly. Use linking words like 'firstly' and 'also' properly. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Explain benefits with specific reasons.

例: There are many benefits to learning history. Firstly, it helps us learn from past mistakes so we don't repeat them. Also, understanding history can improve how we relate to others and make us more knowledgeable.

提案: In English (Cambodia), give a clear and direct answer. Use correct grammar and avoid unclear phrases. Explain why history is important with specific examples and linking words.

例: Yes, learning history is important because it helps us understand our country's past and learn from mistakes, especially about wars. This knowledge teaches us about the impact on people and guides our future decisions.

× Yes, I have studied many things about it an mostly the topic.

✓ Yes, I have studied many things about it and mostly the topics.

The word 'topic' should be plural 'topics' because 'many things' implies multiple topics. Also, 'an' is a typo and should be 'and'.

× It could also included about our country and sums are about the other the other from the other country as well.

✓ It could also include our country and some are about other countries as well.

The verb 'included' should be in base form 'include' after 'could'. 'Sums' is a typo for 'some'. 'The other the other from the other country' is redundant and incorrect; corrected to 'other countries'.

× And especially if we learn about the culture and what really happened in the past, specially about war.

✓ And especially if we learn about the culture and what really happened in the past, especially about war.

The word 'specially' is incorrect here; the correct adverb is 'especially' to indicate emphasis.

× I learn it efficiently. From YouTube, Anne Bye.

✓ I learn it efficiently from YouTube, Anne Bye.

The preposition 'from' should be connected to the previous sentence; starting a sentence with 'From' here is incorrect.

× Listening to others people talk especially on YouTube or Tiktok.

✓ Listening to other people talk especially on YouTube or TikTok.

The phrase 'others people' is incorrect; it should be 'other people'. Also, 'Tiktok' should be capitalized as 'TikTok'.

× I would say it's a lot.

✓ I would say there are a lot of benefits.

The phrase 'it's a lot' is vague; specifying 'there are a lot of benefits' clarifies the meaning.

× I mean, you you couldn't repeat the same mistakes and learn about the impacts are for did you do might affect how other people behave as well.

✓ I mean, you couldn't repeat the same mistakes and learn about how the impacts of what you did might affect how other people behave as well.

The sentence has repeated 'you' and incorrect structure; corrected for clarity and grammar.

× And also it's kind of have like. Make me look smart.

✓ And also it kind of makes me look smart.

The phrase 'it's kind of have like' is incorrect; 'it kind of makes me look smart' is correct.

× The adding learning history is important because it is one of our greatest that we can get to know more about our countries, about our past, the mistake that we did and what we can learn from it, especially if it's apart war.

✓ I think learning history is important because it is one of the greatest ways we can get to know more about our country, our past, the mistakes we made, and what we can learn from them, especially if it's about war.

The sentence has incorrect pronouns and awkward phrasing; corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Yeah, we can alert learn a lot about it from it as well, such as the impact it has from the people in the past.

✓ Yeah, we can also learn a lot about it, such as the impact it had on the people in the past.

'Alert learn' is incorrect; should be 'also learn'. 'Impact it has from the people' is incorrect; corrected to 'impact it had on the people'.