Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence. Then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammar errors (use present simple consistently and correct word order).

例: No, I'm not very good at giving gifts. I often find it difficult because I don't know the recipient's preferences, and I worry the gift won't be useful. For example, I once bought clothing only to find it didn't fit, so now I prefer asking for hints before choosing a present.

提案: Begin with a simple topic sentence naming occasions, then add a specific example and use linking words (e.g., "for example", "also"). Correct articles and plural forms. Keep to 2–4 sentences maximum.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays, weddings and religious festivals. For example, at my sister's birthday I like to give a book or a handmade card. I also give small gifts during festivals to show my appreciation and good wishes.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence about your main considerations, then provide specific details using linking words (e.g., "first", "also"). Use correct verb forms and word order, and give one concrete example of how you choose based on preferences and quality.

例: When choosing a gift, I think first about what the person likes and then about the quality of the item. For instance, if my friend enjoys cooking, I will buy a good-quality kitchen tool that I know they will use. I also consider whether the gift is practical and within my budget.

提案: Answer directly and correct pronouns and tense. Give a brief description of the handmade gift and explain why it was special using linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Keep it natural and concise.

例: Yes, I once made a flower pot for my mother on her wedding anniversary. I painted the pot and planted her favorite flowers, which made it special because she appreciated the personal effort. She still keeps it on her windowsill.

提案: State your opinion clearly, then support it with reasons and an example. Use simple, correct sentence structures and linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Avoid awkward phrases and repetition.

例: No, I don't think expensive gifts necessarily express feelings better because meaning comes from thought and effort. For example, a heartfelt letter or a homemade meal can show more emotion than an expensive item. Therefore, the value of a gift depends on intention rather than price.

× No, I'm not good at giving gifts and it's a very confusing thing to give a gift to anyone and I'm mostly confused at time.

✓ No, I'm not good at giving gifts; it's very confusing to give a gift to someone, and I'm often unsure when to do so.

The original sentence is run-on and awkwardly structured. Use a semicolon or separate sentences to connect related clauses. Replace 'to give a gift to anyone' with 'to give a gift to someone' for natural phrasing. Change 'mostly confused at time' to 'often unsure when to do so' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× When I usually give gifts to others on special occasions like birthday or ceremony or wedding functions and festivals.

✓ I usually give gifts to others on special occasions like birthdays, ceremonies, weddings, and festivals.

The original is a sentence fragment and has tense/number issues. Begin with 'I usually give' for a complete present-simple statement. Use plural nouns 'birthdays' and 'ceremonies' and 'weddings' and separate items with commas for clarity.

× So this time to give our greetings, it's the very precious and permanent.

✓ So giving our greetings at these times is very special and meaningful.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Rephrase to a complete clause: 'giving our greetings at these times' as the subject and 'is very special and meaningful' as the predicate. 'Precious and permanent' is unnatural here; 'special and meaningful' fits context.

× I mostly considered the things that person likes the gift that I given by me and all also that quality of the gift are good enough, so person used that gift also.

✓ I mainly consider what the person likes, the gift I give, and whether the gift's quality is good enough so the person will use it.

Original mixes past and present incorrectly and has subject-verb agreement issues. Use present simple 'consider' for habitual action. Replace 'that person likes the gift that I given by me' with 'what the person likes' and 'the gift I give'. Use 'is good enough' for singular 'quality' and express purpose with 'so the person will use it.'

× Yes, once I remember that I gave up one flower pot handmade to my mother on his wedding anniversary and it was a very special gift for me to do, given by me.

✓ Yes, I remember giving a handmade flower pot to my mother on her wedding anniversary; it was a very special gift for me to make.

Original mixes tenses and uses incorrect pronoun 'his' for 'mother.' Use 'I remember giving' to report a past memory. 'Handmade flower pot' is natural noun order. Use 'her wedding anniversary.' 'It was a very special gift for me to make' is clearer than awkward passive phrasing.

× Well, gifts are not expressed the feeling by the price check as the normal price.

✓ Well, gifts do not express feelings simply based on price.

Original is ungrammatical and awkward. Use active structure 'gifts do not express feelings' and add 'simply based on price' to convey that price alone does not determine emotional value.

× Gifts are also much expressed feelings of individuals and there is no thing that always the expensive gifts express better feelings.

✓ Gifts can express people's feelings in many ways, and expensive gifts do not always express feelings better than inexpensive ones.

Original sentence is awkward and has incorrect word order. Rephrase: 'Gifts can express people's feelings' and then clarify comparison: 'expensive gifts do not always express feelings better than inexpensive ones.' This corrects word order and clarifies meaning.