Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example and a brief reason. Avoid repetition and filler words (uh, I mean). Use correct phrases (e.g., "give gifts to my family").

例: I enjoy giving gifts to my family and friends. For example, I often buy something special for my mother, such as gold jewelry, because she values meaningful presents that show appreciation.

提案: Provide a clear, structured answer: state the main occasions, use linking words, and give one short specific example. Remove hesitation and repeated words.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions, such as festivals and when I receive my salary. For instance, I often buy presents for my family during Lunar New Year and after I get paid to celebrate.

提案: Answer with a direct topic sentence and then give specific criteria and an example. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., "meaningful or memorable") and link ideas with words like "because" or "for example."

例: When choosing a gift, I look for something meaningful and memorable because I want the recipient to feel a personal connection. For example, I might choose a photo album that reminds them of a shared trip.

提案: Keep answers concise and avoid repetition. State clearly whether you have made handmade gifts, describe one example with a simple detail, and explain briefly why you made it.

例: Yes, I have made handmade gifts. For example, I made a bracelet for my mother because she loves simple jewelry, and she appreciated the personal touch.

提案: Give a clear opinion in one sentence, then support it with a reason and a brief example. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Use vocabulary like "express emotions" and "thoughtful".

例: I don't think expensive gifts necessarily express feelings; thoughtful gifts often do. For example, a handwritten letter or a handmade item can show care more effectively than an expensive purchase.

× Yes, I will always try to give my best to giving gifts with my friends or relatives or my mom's.

✓ Yes, I will always try to do my best when giving gifts to my friends, relatives, or my mom.

The phrase 'try to give my best to giving' incorrectly combines 'try to' (which should be followed by the base verb) with a gerund phrase. Use 'try to do my best when giving' or 'try my best to give' for correct verb forms and preposition placement; also correct possessive 'my mom's' to 'my mom' and use 'to' before the indirect object list.

× Uh, especially I will give my mom some special gift like gold sometimes.

✓ Especially, I will give my mom a special gift, like gold, sometimes.

The noun 'gift' needs the indefinite article 'a' because it is singular and countable. Add commas for clarity around 'like gold' and position adverb 'sometimes' at the end for natural word order.

× Every time like uh, when I get salary I will give give when, uh, when come festivals then I will also give, I will also give gift.

✓ Usually, when I receive my salary I give gifts; I also give gifts during festivals.

Use present simple 'receive' or 'get' for habitual actions rather than 'will' which implies future. 'Salary' requires a determiner 'my'. Remove repeated words and simplify; 'give gift' needs plural or article: 'give gifts' or 'give a gift' depending on context.

× I always consider when I introducing the gift it's like a meaningful or memorable things like something in past happening.

✓ I always consider, when I am introducing a gift, whether it is meaningful or memorable, something connected to a past event.

The verb 'introducing' needs the auxiliary 'am' for present continuous. 'Things' should agree in number with 'a meaningful or memorable', so change to 'something' or rephrase. Use 'connected to' or 'related to a past event' instead of 'in past happening' for correct preposition and noun phrase.

× So that's why I always try to my best.

✓ So that's why I always try my best.

The phrase 'try to my best' is ungrammatical; correct collocation is 'try my best' or 'try to do my best'. Remove 'to' to fix structure.

× Yes, I made handmade gift also that is a bracelet like Locket sunflower bouquet.

✓ Yes, I made a handmade gift as well; it was a bracelet, like a locket or a sunflower bouquet.

Singular countable nouns need 'a' ('a handmade gift', 'a bracelet', 'a locket'). Use clearer conjunctions and punctuation to separate items and correct word order.

× Also I give my mom uh, I mean I, I made my uh handmade uh, bracelet.

✓ I also gave my mom a handmade bracelet that I made.

Pronoun and tense inconsistency: 'give' should match past 'made' (use 'gave'), and 'my handmade bracelet' needs an article 'a'. Remove hesitations and duplicate words to make sentence clear.

× I think it might be not gift are expensive.

✓ I don't think gifts need to be expensive.

The original has incorrect word order and auxiliary placement. Use negative with 'do not think' and an infinitive 'need to be' to express the idea correctly; also use plural 'gifts' or 'a gift' consistently.

× It's not your feeling expressions like it's, uh, emotional when you give give like some expensive tip.

✓ Expensive gifts do not necessarily express your feelings; emotions matter more than price.

The phrase 'your feeling expressions' is awkward; use 'express your feelings'. 'Expensive tip' is incorrect word choice—use 'expensive gift'. Remove duplicate words and restructure to use appropriate adjectives and noun phrases.

× Not it's not uh really happening.

✓ That's not really the case.

The original is fragmented and uses incorrect pronoun reference. Replace with natural fixed expression 'That's not really the case.' to convey intended meaning concisely.

× It's a feelings or emotionals.

✓ It's about feelings or emotions.

'Feelings' and 'emotions' are nouns; 'emotionals' is not a correct plural adjective. Use 'about' to indicate the topic and the correct plural noun forms.