Gifts— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your habit, then give one specific reason and one short example. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and avoid redundancy.

例: I prefer giving food rather than material gifts because it's more likely to please the recipient. For example, I often prepare a friend’s favourite dish so they can enjoy it immediately and remember the occasion.

提案: Answer directly about when you give gifts (e.g., birthdays, holidays). Use past simple for past events and be specific in your example. Keep sentences short and coherent, using linking words like because or for instance.

例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as birthdays or holidays. For instance, last year I brought my friend his favourite cake to his birthday, which made him very happy.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence (I consider the recipient’s preferences), then give one specific factor and a brief reason. Remove filler words and repeat words. Use linking words like for example or because.

例: I consider the recipient’s preferences when choosing a gift. For example, if someone prefers experiences over objects, I will prepare their favourite meal because it feels personal and memorable.

提案: Clearly state whether you have or have not given a handmade gift. If yes, describe one specific instance simply and accurately. Avoid confusing tense and unclear phrases; use past simple for a past event and one or two supporting details.

例: Yes, I have given a handmade gift. Once I bought a handmade necklace from an online store for a friend; he loved it and still keeps it as a memento.

提案: Give a clear opinion first (yes or no), then explain briefly with one or two reasons. Use logical linking words (however, because). Avoid unclear phrases about standards; be concrete about emotions and examples.

例: Not necessarily. I think thoughtful gifts often express feelings better than expensive ones because they show you know the person’s tastes. However, an expensive gift can be appropriate when it reflects the recipient’s needs or your special relationship.

× I'm not really good at giving gifts but I preferred the food as yeah an actual gift to a specific person because if I give a material things like they can able to use as well, I don't even know if that person will like my gift.

✓ I'm not really good at giving gifts, but I prefer giving food as an actual gift to a specific person because if I give material things, they may be able to use them, and I don't know if that person will like my gift.

Pronoun and determiner issues: 'preferred' should be present 'prefer' to match habitual meaning (present tense) and subject 'I'. 'a material things' mixes singular article with plural noun; change to 'material things' or 'a material thing'. 'they can able to use' is incorrect auxiliary usage; use 'they may be able to use them' or 'they can use them'. Also add a comma to separate clauses and remove filler words. Use consistent tense and correct pronouns (them) for plural 'things'.

× So I prepared their preferred food so they can eat it and cherish the things of the moment.

✓ So I prepared their preferred food so they could eat it and cherish the moment.

Preposition and verb tense: 'cherish the things of the moment' is awkward; use 'cherish the moment'. Use past-tense 'could' to match the student describing a past action or keep present if habitual. Here 'prepared' is past, so 'could' is appropriate. Simplify phrase for natural expression.

× I remembered one time that one of my friends invited me to his birthday and I gave him a special gift of food that one of his favorite and also I made him happy during that day.

✓ I remember one time when one of my friends invited me to his birthday, and I gave him a special food gift that was one of his favorites, and I made him happy that day.

Tense and pronoun use: 'I remembered' implies a past continuous memory but 'I remember' is more natural when recounting past events; either is possible but consistency matters. 'that one of his favorite' is missing verb 'was' and plural 'favorites'. Add commas and use 'that day' instead of 'during that day'. Correct pronoun placement and verb forms for clarity.

× That's why I prepared the food as yes gift to to someone who.

✓ That's why I prepared the food as a gift for someone.

Sentence structure and articles: The original has repetition 'to to' and filler 'yes' and an incomplete clause 'someone who'. Use 'a gift for someone' to complete the idea. Add article 'a'.

× I consider the preference of the person.

✓ I consider the person's preferences.

Pronoun and noun form: 'preference of the person' is grammatically acceptable but unnatural; use the possessive form 'person's preferences' (plural) to sound natural when talking about choices.

× For example, it doesn't like the specific items but instead prepared food.

✓ For example, they don't like specific items, so I prepared food instead.

Pronoun and tense agreement: 'it doesn't like' incorrectly uses 'it' for a person; use 'they' or 'he/she'. Maintain tense consistency: 'prepared' is past; link clauses with 'so'. Place 'instead' at end for natural word order.

× So so that I I realize that the favorite food is the most valuable gift to a person that also not intending to have material things.

✓ So I realized that favorite food is the most valuable gift for a person who does not intend to have material things.

Tense and sentence structure: Remove repeated words. Use past 'realized' to match narrative. 'that also not intending to have material things' is ungrammatical; convert to relative clause 'for a person who does not intend to have material things'. Adjust article usage: 'favorite food' is fine without 'the' in general statement.

× I remembered one time that I bought from the online store the hand handmade gift that also one of my recipients of reference during that time and he really likes it too much.

✓ I remember one time I bought a handmade gift from an online store for one of my recipients, and he really liked it.

Tense and word choice: 'hand handmade' redundant; use 'handmade'. 'bought from the online store' -> 'bought from an online store'. 'recipients of reference' is unclear; replace with 'recipient'. Use past tense 'liked' to describe his reaction. Avoid 'too much' which is unnatural here.

× And that is one specific gift that teachers until now that he keep it in his memories as his friend.

✓ That is a special gift that he still keeps as a memory of our friendship.

Sentence structure and word choice: 'teachers until now' is incorrect; likely meant 'even now' or 'still'. 'he keep it in his memories as his friend' is ungrammatical; use 'he still keeps it as a memory of our friendship'. Use correct tense 'keeps'.

× I prepared that the the gift is. Expensive with a good value as well because the the your recipient will realize that the expensive items also he he's standard of having those items and he'll there is possibility.

✓ I think the gift should be somewhat expensive and have good value because the recipient may recognize its value and think it matches his standards of owning such items.

Major sentence structure and grammar errors: Remove repeated words, join sentence fragments, and correct modal usage. Replace 'I prepared that the gift is' with 'I think the gift should be', change 'Expensive with a good value' to 'be somewhat expensive and have good value'. 'the your recipient' -> 'the recipient' or 'your recipient'. 'also he he's standard of having those items' is unclear; render as 'think it matches his standards of owning such items'. Use 'may' to express possibility rather than 'there is possibility'.